All Sales Final

All Sales Final

 

 

skin on skin

lies on lies

you once loved me

or did you?

was I just a pillow

for your greedy head?

 

I was too wrapped up in the illusion

to see that inside the gift

another box waited to be opened

 

go peddle your wares somewhere else

shower another with your deceit

I no longer accept returns

without a receipt

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

That's surely one of my fav. writes!

Liked the ending of the piece... how strong and intriguing words you do use to shape your art. Quite interesting! Seemed, the love's no longer for sale so if someone comes back at you to return you the figments of love, it becomes your priority to not to accept it anymore, cause.. till then, your heart becomes anew pottery of flesh that wishes no longer to take un-necessary things back. Excellent work!

[rubie]

Thanks for the review. So glad you enjoyed this piece.
Appreciate the kind words.

[....................]

I love everything about this piece (the title, the questions, the image of a gift within a gift, the suggestion of taking one's wares elsewhere, and the firm hand) except the deceit that leaves us bitter. The last line is one I wish I had written and forwarded to a certain someone, way back when. Looks like you need to go on a shopping spree, Rubie!

[rubie]

Perhaps I do.....

But then again, shopping sprees often end in the purchase of unwanted things only bought on the spur of the moment to satisfy a deeper need.

This piece, written long ago, was composed after feeling the sting of a betrayal....

[....................]

True, of course, we often buy emotionally after a traumatic experience. I just noticed the date it was published... i am a little behind :)

[rubie]

Not to worry.....

Dates on pieces don't matter much, except so that we can revisit how we felt at the time. We should never forget such things.

[....................]

No, a gentle reminder from time to time so we don't make similar mistakes.

[rubie]

Ah yes. Very true....

[Lydia Shutter]

Excellent metaphor here. How sad it is that we second guess relationships when they go south. Truth is, we were too wrapped up in the passion and emotion at first to see the red flags. No returns without a receipt....great concept! Lydi**

[rubie]

Absolutely true. This one was inspired by the break-up of a relationship that taught me precisely that. You cannot see "red flags" through the complex emotions that mask them.

[Samuel Dickens]

Many struggle with rejection, so it's nice to see one handling it so resolutely.

[rubie]

Thank you for taking the time to stop by and read my poem. I appreciate your kind remarks. This particular poem was inspired by a destructive and deceitful relationship which I was well rid of.

[steppenwolf]

I always love poems that end in a rhyme.

[rubie]

Thanks. I especially enjoy mixing formats. What started out as free verse ends in rhyme here.

[shallimarRose]

I love the use of metaphor here Rubie.. the last lines are classic.... greait piece. shallimarRose

[rubie]

Thank you so much for your kind words. Appreciate it much.

[Dana Alsamsam]

the pain here is tangible and in the ending you break through with an incredible bit of strength. they say love and depression are an artists best friends and when you have both... you've created something beautiful. great work!

[rubie]

Sorry for the delay in acknowledging your kind review. Thanks so much for your words.

[h d e rushin]

I've been there (let me think) a million times rubie..Now I know what to say when it happens
again....dana

[rubie]

So glad you could relate to this one....

Thanks for the read and the feedback. Much appreciated.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I've been there, done that...and it hurts, immeasurably! At least the "angst" makes for pretty good poetry, Rubie!

My best,
Kelly

[ba_mcfarlane]

You write from your heart. Do you like Shakespeare...

[rubie]

Love him! Is it that obvious??

[ba_mcfarlane]

Yes....do you know of the Shakespearean Festival in Stratford Ontario....http://www.stratfordfestival.ca/ Are you interested....

[rubie]

I've been to many Shakespeare festivals locally; this one's a bit of a trek from NJ, which is where I am. I've been to Stratford, England several times, though....