Heating Up

Heating Up

A Poem by rubie

Heating Up  (A Senryu)

 

Simmering kisses

Bring me to the boiling point

We evaporate

© 2015 rubie


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Clever senryu. I like this very much. Totally visual.

Chris

Posted 4 Years Ago


So clever and Steamy!! love this! What a smiler this little gem is! lol

Posted 8 Years Ago


rubie

8 Years Ago

Glad you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it!
Thank you!
andrew mitchell

8 Years Ago

very clever and I like clever and I like Wit!:)
The water cycle of love. You could not have condensed another syllable. It truly is perfect and can be said in one breath for that is all you need between kisses.

Posted 8 Years Ago


icelandicblue

8 Years Ago

One day, a woman with whom I became friendly with, urged me to wrote longer pieces. That was in 2006.. read more
rubie

8 Years Ago

I understand completely. Simple is always best, especially where words are concerned. So much can .. read more
icelandicblue

8 Years Ago

Weaving a story out of 17 syllables is a gift most precious.
Ah... you got me!

You speak the heart in a few manifest words for sure. Lovers 'neath the sky, winds across the room, warmth ov'r the hearts & the pleasure of night in the doom. Excellent! Lol

Posted 8 Years Ago


rubie

8 Years Ago

thanks for stopping by, and for leaving such a kind review.
nice metaphor here...clever senryu.

j.

Posted 8 Years Ago


rubie

8 Years Ago

thanks, jacob.
had fun playing with this form.

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Added on October 30, 2015
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I am a retired high school English teacher from New Jersey where I've lived all my life, except for 4 years when I lived in Philadelphia in the mid 1970s. I enjoy reading the work of other writer.. more..

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