Mirror

Mirror

A Poem by James O'Rourke
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A work in progress

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Yellow teeth

Yellow hair

Yellow nails

Dried up and crusty right hand

Moon white feet

Balding head

Hairy face, chest and back

Legs and arms

Potato sack sagging bottom

Violet line stretched hips


You're a wreck man


He's cigarette smoking

Beer drinking

Got bad feelings

Suicide dreams

With a bland queen


Wears coats with torn cuffs

Backpack stuffed with planned bluffs

Watches cheek sucking crooks

Snatching all the good stoops

© 2015 James O'Rourke


Author's Note

James O'Rourke
As mentioned in the description: this is a work in progress. Got myself stuck after the last stanza and can't really take it anywhere. Anyway, thanks for checking what I have so far. I'll try to get more done soon. All comments and criticisms welcome.

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The poem definitely has me interested! It certainly does make me want to continue reading more!! Love the "suicide dreams with a bland queen" line. Not entirely sure of it's whole meaning (yet) but that's probably a good thing - leaves people wondering. Good start; excited to read the rest sometime :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


James O'Rourke

5 Years Ago

Happy that you're interested to read more of it! I haven't really been tackling this piece as much a.. read more
A list of items named objectively. I enjoy this because you've captured, and accurately, milliseconds of self-loathing that are commonly felt but not talked about. Regardless as to whether it's personal or no: thank you for talking about it. I really do like your writing.

Posted 5 Years Ago


James O'Rourke

5 Years Ago

Thank you for checking it out. I've been in a rut of lists lately. However, it is very cathartic to .. read more

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Added on November 21, 2015
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James O'Rourke
James O'Rourke

Tempe, AZ



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