let yourself feel

let yourself feel

A Poem by sarah

You lost your father

The man who made you smile when you wanted to cry

The man who was always willing to listen

The man who made your problems his own

 

You lost your father

The man who could make anyplace a home

Who would always cradle you when you were sad

The man who would always dry your tears

 

You lost your father

The man you confided in

The man you trusted

The man you loved

 

And now I see you stand there not one tear slides down your cheek

You stand there denying the pain with all your might

You stand like a brick wall unable to move

You stand emotionless...

 

Let yourself feel....

Let yourself see...

Let yourself come to terms

 

Your pain is my pain

When you cry I cry

When you feel I feel

 

Let yourself feel....please....let yourself feel....

 

© 2010 sarah


Author's Note

sarah
This is about a man in my church who just died, I was VERY close to his son. His son and he were best friends, they relied on each other, they were more than father and son, they were best friends. And when the son lost his dad he became lost, he doesn't bother to show emotion, he won't even admit to being hurt over it. He stands like an emotionless wall.

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Wow, this was a really touching poem, inspired by a very sad yet very real story. I liked the flow of this piece and thought that it almost read like lyrics to a song. There seemed to be a real sense of insight and maturity in this piece that I admired, and thought that the last line was the perfect, yet most heartbreaking way to end the piece. Great work,
~PaperHearts

Posted 9 Years Ago


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A father and son who have strong connections will become loss without the other one. A very sad poem. He will need good friends. I miss my father still after 14 year. He departed my life. A very sad and strong poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Emotion us something that is hard to ignore.... you can almost trust me that when he is alone he cries his heart out...

Posted 9 Years Ago


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touching. This must have been very hard to write. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Sarah, this is beautifully written poem.
My dad died just a couple of months ago.. I relate to this so much, and brought back all the emotions.
Really excellent job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Sometimes it takes time for the emotion to reveal itself. I was extremely close to my Mother and loved her fiercely. We lived together the last twenty years of her life. When she died, I was stunned past emotion; I remember very little of that year after she died, everyone thought I was horrible and cold. Eventually the dam broke and I began to feel again, feel all the grief and loss. Just be his friend, don't judge, people mourn in varying ways.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This is a really emotional write, and I feel the concern from one human being for another here....really beautiful. It's funny how people react when events like that happen....I guess we;re all different. I really like the final line in this piece too...."let yourself feel....."
Thanks for sharing..

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Ah.. this is so sad. My prayers and thoughts are with him. Very sad and moving poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I have seen this paralysis of emotion in the loss of a loved one, you write of it well ...

Posted 9 Years Ago


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very emotional and touching piece
" when you cry I cry"- simple, sincere, and beautiful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Wow... I am not even able to comment on this beautiful work. I am nearly about to cry. Beautiful work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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My name is Sarah just another Sarah, to go along with the millions of other Sarah's hehe anyway umm...I am really bad at spelling C and grammar it's a pain in the a*s so...yeah I won't U review books .. more..

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