Standing Here

   Standing in the rain...

 

"I like it here"

 

Dripping Condensation radiating through my souls vibrations

Passing Faces, but they all look the same, Swollen hearts with nothing to tame

Originality Flows like

Rain

In the gutter

 

"She is waiting but god only knows what for"

 

Curious like a mislead heart, with worlds torn apart.

Unmovable are you

Yet im still wishin, that the lovely kissin ,lasted longer than this head on collision

 

"Who are you?"

 

Not the person I thought, with rocky roads and troubled times

You become the person so hard to find.

F**k it

Ill stay on this grind, till its my time to shine and we can fit

like words and rhyme. Hearts intertwined till time ceases to be important.

 

"To think i closed my eyes"

 

its 24 hours past midnight

and Im tired of standing outside

 

Reviews

[Y. Counts]

I dig where this takes you--
"I'll stay on this grind, til its my time to shine and we can fit like words and rhyme."
Like that deep, stinging pain of loss of love. A pleasure to read.

[O!]

I read this twice already and will have to read it again coz it brings a different picture each time...enjoyed ur imagination here and how u played with ur words..!

x,
O!

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

I am so Jealous of ur talent!!!
This is Amazing!!
I love how it can be interpited many diff ways witch makes it easy for anyone to relate to!!
This is a very beautiful piece!
U gotta keep writing!!!

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

its 24 hours past midnight

thats the best line ive seen all day.
i love it.
the whole thing.

[emz]

i,m so jealous of this poem... its so beautiful... i just melted into the words.

thank-you for writing it.

x

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

There is a longing in this poem that is very prophetic - thank you for sharing. Well done...the rain seems to represent the tears of the lonely in a way...although I might be way off base...at least that is what I felt from reading it.
Light,
Siddartha

[Kara Emily Krantz]

damn. this is great. really great. i love the flow, the set-up... the whole dang thing :)

"Originality Flows like

Rain

In the gutter"

like it. me likes a lot :)

[theladyjai]

i really liked this poem because i feel like you said what i couldnt in my own.

[KEENAMARiE]

this has ALWAYS been my favorite of everything i have ever read of yours. your words play so vividly in my mind its so easy to picture..