A walk in the woods

Most days I go to the local woods I love to walk around seeing what's new , sometimes I even stop there before I go to work just to put food out for the birds, squirrels and whatever else comes by. I like to take photos of them too. I was inspired to writ

Went for a walk in the woods today
First thing I saw was a beautiful Jay
A quick  flash of blue
And then away it flew

Next I saw something yellow
it was a Brimstone being mellow
Fluttering by and up to the sky
I didn't even get to say Hi

I heard it sing with puffed out chest
then I saw the red of it's breast
A robin on the branch above me
sweetly singing for all to see

High above I heard a rustle
I wondered what was all the bustle
It was then I saw a blur of white
A woodpecker was in my sight

All of a sudden something grey,
Something else to see today
A squirrel gathering nuts to hide
There it goes, over to my left side

Went for a walk in the woods today
Plenty to see any time of the day
The sun is down now,  out of sight
I leave the woods and say goodnight

Sally Edwards
01/04/2008

Reviews

[Rockebah]

I love the poem. It was very good. It has good rhythum and rhyme and the imagery was brilliant. But the thing that really caught my attention was the colour scheme. The idea of putting each stanza in the colour mentioned about in it was good. Once again I enjoyed reading this poem alot. I am inspired by your words.

[NCPanthersgurl]

I was waiting for a line about a flower of orange XD haha, jk, this was wonderfully written. Great job!

[Wolfwind Words]

Awsome eye appealing work of art! I loved how it was simplistic yet cute! Like the poems, my mom used to read to me while i was a young child.

Yet it did live me with a song running through me head! "Rockin Robin" lol

Great Write Sally! :)

[Kris Tate]

Reminds me of home. I love how the colors match the stanzas, you should so enter this in some contest, it could pull first prize. The simplicity and the description make it work.

[Adventerous Amy]

exellent i think if you search for a good contest and you enter it it would win!!!!
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[Travis Lawrence]

Lovely use of color in the form. I saw two bluejays perch outside my bedroom window a few days ago, and this makes me want to write a poem for them.

-Travis

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This is good! I loved the colors. I think you really described what it is like to go for a walk in the woods. Nice work!