Aware

A romance poem...A sort of a love letter...

Aware/……………………By Sami Khalil

A romance poem…

The Poem:

Dancing with vim and vigor,

Long before stars' dim flicker

And the leaves that wither...

Long before the winnowing

Of the wind across soul-scented

Barns and old plowed fields…

Long before our silent questions

Became aware of potentiality

And their scattered companions (answers)…

Conversely, it was “just us”,

Painted in the sheen's of love prompt,

With poignant looks at life and laughter.

Long before roots remember

soil’s drifted fragrances,

Or the five senses of the truest form,

Away from all common places.

Long before wishful thinking,

Merit and demerit,

Even instruments knowing their plectrums;

I read your eyes! I fathomed the silence we spoke constantly!

I loved you! 

Reviews

[Faati Jaan]

I loooove the way this builds up to a simple and beautiful conclusion. Also, I really appreciated the mixture of simple and complex ideas.
(Simple: "the leaves that wither.."
complex:
"..our silent questions
Became aware of potentiality
And their scattered companions.")
A truly beautifully written work of art :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you so much dear poet for this lovely review and kind words. I,m graced by it all...:)....

[Cory Barrett]

Reading this for me is out standing. I was thinking this weekend of writing a piece very similar to this, but you did it so wonderfully! I may just refrain from doing so. Really lovely Sami

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. Thank you so much beloved poet for this amazing review and kind words. You have graced me with all...Take care...:)......................

[Alfred Kukitz]

Talk about the silence of love being heard around the world. This is the one folks! Great work Sami!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you so much Alfred for this wonderful review and lovely sentiments. Many rich blessings...:).......................

[Alfred Kukitz]

I'm beginning to herd around my favorites with an occasional drifting off into new poem lands. I find you an excellent writer; I always enjoy your work.

[Sami Khalil]

Same sentiments towards you. Thank you kindly...:)........................

[wordman]

the setting seems to be in Amsterdam the thoughts transferred to words was a great thought
the theme behind the poem was great

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You could say that dear poet. I'm so glad I can contribute to the wonderful romance writers we have on this site like yourself. Be blessed...:).....................

[wordman]

thanks and your welcome

[Sami Khalil]

:)..............................

[Wall Hermitt]

Your final conclusory lines are stunningly written. “I fathomed the silence we spoke constantly!” Intriguing phrase. But then again as I read the poem I arrive at the realization, whilst perusing line after line that each one could not have been more ideally written. “Long before our silent questions became aware of potentiality”. Nicely said and elegantly personified. Your poem’s full of powerful, appealing imagery. One of the best romance poems I’ve seen in a while. Thanks for the share.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Wowza to this wonderful review and kind appreciation. So glad and honored you like this romantic poem...:)......................

[Anne Timmins]

This is a beautiful write..it "pulled" me along with it and deep into its essence.. I enjoyed it very much

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. That is wonderful then. So glad this romance pulled you in. I,m.thankful for all... :)........

[s y e]

Again with the artwork my sweet friend, you blow me away each time - I think we have the same sense in artwork, LOL. Your poem was utterly gorgeous, I have missed reading you, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. We sure do. I missed your visits too dear beloved friend. So glad you like the romance in this poem... Take care...:)..........

[Jennie Baron]

The whole poem is exquisite, and as always you have an uncommon gift for the language, but the last two lines are my very favorite. As you can probably guess, they truly captured me. Thanks for the read request, Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I'm also captured by your lovely visit and your appreciation. So thankful for all...Have a great one...:).....................

[Frieda P]

You truly are a romantic soul Sami...nothing 'sort of' about this one, you knew I'd love the dance... it is love taken wings even before it's brilliance began. I read your eyes, sigh.....

Wasn't sure how enticing 'Even instruments knowing their plectrums' would be in a love letter, but I get the noted connotation there.... ;)

Excellent as always.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you so much beloved poet for all you say and do. That line specifically I meant as the contact between the instrument and its plectrum before you hear the melody or the music if that makes any sense. You know my imagination travels...lol
Grazie mille for all...:)........................

[Frieda P]

Yes, I know, it took me a second to follow your madness, or is it genius? haha ;)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha...Are we both in the same boat...lol just kidding...:)..........

[Frieda P]

Probably, all poets are mad in one way or another. ;) haa

[Sami Khalil]

So true...Grazie mille...:)...........................

[Matching Socks]

Oh Sami...
You made me feel such love in this sweet little thing you call a mere scribble.
I floated with your love over the barn, past the fields and deep into the soil to grab hold of the roots of this beautiful wonderful love. But then you ripped my heart out of the soil with three little words..
"I loved you!" This is a beautiful moment. Why is the love past tense. You should be ashamed, breaking young hearts. (Unless you meant that you loved your muse in the physical sense? In which case I say "Yay" and all is ok.)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. It is still in the past, present and future. Just telling her I loved her before anything made sense in our world and so forth. So glad you took the time and effort to visit and review. All appreciated...:)........................

[Matching Socks]

I love a happy ending. Thank you. :-)

[Sami Khalil]

:)...........................