Empty

A strange feeling...

Empty……………………………………….

                                     By Sami Khalil

Wherefore,

When spring brings

Its fervored passions

Out of hibernation

In coattails

And season's bedight fashions,

I still commensurate not!

 

Wherefore,

When life transcends

In versed action

Other vantage points

Out of grave existence

Oh! Hearts, distraught and ashen,

I still commensurate not!

 

Wherefore,

When justice exhibits

Banners of compassion

In strange calligraphy

Mercurial diadems befallen

With utter bail traction,

I still commensurate not!

 

Wherefore,

I’m frigid

Empty…

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Empty'
Sami Khalil,Th
This was structured to show the feelings which are lying stagnant in a box during a time (spring) which ordinarily should bring inspiration and joy.
The word, 'which' shows the stark structure as it leads into each line of melancholy rather than joy.
Then your use the phrases of the souls hope along with the darkness of a sad heart.
'When Spring brings it's fervored passions out of hibernation. line 1
When justice brings it's banners of compassion' line 3
These above references to good are contrasted well with a heart feeling like a stone and not nurturing and soft.
Well, too the feelings of each person are always their own and definitely always real to them personally as this poem you wrote truly showed. Great writing on the different ways we can feel and function at any one time. I hope I was not to far out in left field.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Well said and shared. I must have been down at that time feeling sorry and sensitive. Things are getting better. We all have those ups and downs. Thank you so much beloved poet for all.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Yes Sami I so agree. Humanity is so complex. We are always going through various experiences; 'ups and downs for sure. I read your poem through three times and felt it very meaningful regarding this ability to be downcast and how then we must work to come out of our dark place and find healing somehow. Not always so easy but these things seem to be part of life somehow.
Bless you in your wonderful writing sir!
Kathy

[Sami Khalil]

Bless you too. Gracie millee

[barleygirl]

I find myself wondering if the word "commensurate" is not possibly meant to be "commiserate"!?!?!

I enjoy the way you look around yourself, acknowledging all that flitters & flutters, yet you feel nothing. I know this response well & you've conveyed it realistically. For me, it's going on Facebook & seeing people do their typical daily stuff, like showing off grandkids or interesting meals, but I feel nothing about this stuff. I feign interest, but it's just not the stuff that turns me on. Instead, I come alive when watching nature & the outdoors in my wilderness enclave. I believe that the emptiness you describe can sometimes be a function of being in the wrong setting, rather than having a flawed outlook. But you've done a great job of painting the scene & letting your readers interpret (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! The interpreation is right on the money and the word commensurate is different from commiserate for I was going for something that corresponds in kind or due measure or something that is compensated likewise. The poem describes the feeling of extreme depression or feeling so low that it is hard to relate to all those majestic and great things in life. In other words, it has a philosophical dimension for it shows in reality how our mental and emotional condition can alter our responses to many things, natural and abstract, and changes the perspectives on many things. Thank you so much Barletgirl for all...

[Sami Khalil]

Sorry: Barleygirl...A typo

[Mrudula Rani]

You do notice all the lovely things in your surroundings, and aware that they do not affect you the way they should... that a realization itsel!

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you so much Rani for this lovely review. Take care.

[Mrudula Rani]

You too. please do find pleasure and happiness in little things of life, I will be cheering for you. All the best

[Sami Khalil]

::::::::)))))))))

[emmajoy]

Comes time or times when a human being feels more like a pebble on the road: lifeless - unless kicked by another's shoe; useless - neither usable nor worth a second's look. No matter what's framing Self, the latter lies pale.. empty - numb... unaware of condition or state. Belittled by one's own brain, mind, senses. Perhaps?

[Sami Khalil]

Whoa! So true and well articulated. You are right; Life has its ups and downs. Some humans are more tenacious than others with a fighting spirit. Some just succumb and become a prey. Thank you kindle for taking the time and effort. Happy Holidays.

[emmajoy]

Sharing your words has always been an immense pleasure, Sami... even to that one word!!

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you kindly. All rich blessings.

[lightsong]

from those poems I read from You this must be my favourite! in my opinion superior! I see You speaking in three different things, nature, life, and humanity, how You are feeling not participated to any, how there is no passion to any, no group or creed or even the seeking of finding the truth of Your life, Your reality... You just lost it, the passion and taste of it all, numb, no tears no fears, like You're floating in the air but not free, a strange feeling, like You are human but not human, I've been there, not funny or good thing at all, but it will pass, as long as You are keeping aware of it, sometimes it came from being deeply hurt, sometimes from being over thinking... Great piece, thank You for sharing it my friend!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You have nailed it on the head. I'm so thankful that you can relate. It is like a stage before suicide which is a sin to do but some can't handle the agony and pain. God will heal all brokeness. All rich blessings.

[lightsong]

it will pass my friend, it will! all the richest and warmest blessings to You*

[Sami Khalil]

To you too. God bless.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that feeling....of just not fitting in or wanting to fit in...sometimes i feel like i am in a different plane than others....not that far away from them, yet not quite close enough to make real contact...
sometimes we are our own cold weather...
the coldness coming from deep inside.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! So true and well articulated dear poet. You have spoken the truth. Thank you so much for all.

[Seriana]

I am not sure the exact inspiration for this, but reading from other reviews can understand that sometimes writing comes from any myriad of locations within ourselves. Whatever the inspiration, this is a fine piece of poetry. Although the end came to a halting stop, I found it to be delightful in its girth. The style and structure of the writing is really superb. One of my favorites!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! Thank you so much beloved Seriana for this amazing review and kindness. It is personal so I like to keep the inspiration private if I may. All rich blessings...

[andrew mitchell]

Such power in this write Sami , definitely a conflict of seeing beauty but not recognising its worth when its out there but one feels empty, a state of two minds maybe...... almost a sign of depression maybe but an excellent write all the same. Top notch!

[Sami Khalil]

So true and well articulated. It is amazing how we feel can affect on our perception of things even is they are not realistic. May you have wonderful Holidays.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Beyond mere nonconformity, this appears to be a human being who's somehow become almost unreachable--not even by seemingly hopeful occurrences deserving of celebration. The poet is obviously speaking for or about someone else.
In any event, a sad and tragic state of affairs.

[Sami Khalil]

A sad state indeed great poet for those who have bipolar difficulty where things swing to extreme polar sides. I might need to check myself for diagnosis which it could be so or not. Any way, thank you so much for all.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Forgive me, Sami, I did not recognize you as the subject of this work.
I pray God will heal, protect and bless you.

[Sami Khalil]

Not at all. You are marvelous. A friend will point out things for the good of others. God bless.