Alight Please Sweet Bird of My Wonder

Alight Please Sweet Bird of My Wonder

A Poem by Sam
"

Mon dieu. Je t'aime.

"

Alight please, sweet bird of my wonder,

sing true for me your sound.

Purr in delight at thunder,

deduce for me your ground.

Lengthy curls spill frayed

in a winded fringe,

remarkably unafraid

and wildly subdued tinge.

On that breeze you soar,

your seraphic face does show,

little else but allure,

and feathersome glow.

Your sculpted visage with inlaid

a little nose and pouty lips,

and immaculate-displayed

ivory goddess ellipse.

But most divine and forever,

deeply brown as umber burned,

doth unreproachfully endeavor

yearning eyes I have discerned.

I beg you, dove, admit your appetite,

I’m ardently ill, a-seized by fierce lust.

Fly here Aphrodite,

cleaved en masse we may rust.

© 2015 Sam


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Please pardon me if I interpret your poem incorrectly. I like the use of personification of this person you may/may not be writing of. Moreover, there seems to be a playfulness in the mention of purring at thunder and the pouty lips and nose. It seems, this little bird that you wish to "admit it's appetite," has a flirtatious, If bewitching aura is all the more attractive by the slight rhyming in the initial lines. It has a sort of whimsical air to it. the only problem I have is the line where you said "Your sculpted visage with inlaid a little nose and pouty lips." I feel like it interrupts the flow at "a little nose and pouty lips." otherwise, I see it as a good piece. Again, pardon me in my thoughts, if it is that I have misread your poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Sam

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much. I would have interpreted it the same way to be honest. It's absolutely supposed.. read more
songstress

10 Years Ago

you're welcome. That sounds interesting, I guess I know where you're coming from when you talk about.. read more



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Like it, like it , like it. Very well written, sir...:)................

Posted 9 Years Ago


very well expressed it's filled with latent ideas and I like the style you write...loved It

Posted 9 Years Ago


Gorgeous, Sam. Simply gorgeous. Truly.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is an excellent poem. I hope to read more from you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


The phrasing is perfect! My favourite lines would be
"Lengthy curls spill frayed

in a winded fringe,

remarkably unafraid

and wildly subdued tinge. "



Posted 10 Years Ago


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Thanks to all of you for your kind words. I appreciate it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Love how peaceful of a tone this sets. Great job, really enjoyed reading it:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


feels personal, ever so personal...

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is quirky and yet your use of language refreshing as too many poems on this site seemed either dumbed down or going for a trashy shock factor -weak with no effort-so I truly appreciate your wordplay here well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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