Autumnal Equinox - Tanka

Autumnal Equinox - Tanka

A Poem by Haruki
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Special thanks to the rock and roll cowboy

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The last departure?

It is like the vapor mist

Hanging from a cloud

Rising from the autumn marsh

Vanishing in the moonlight

© 2008 Haruki


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Your poem is as mysterious as birth and death. Who or what is coming and going? Somewhat noisy solidities we appear to be, but quantum physics tells us the "hard little nuggets" of matter, the atoms, are not that at all. Underneath the nugget is a micro-solar system. Underneath the micro-solar system is a mad realm of particle-wave paradox, wherein materiality is merely a TENDENCY, and reality is contingent upon the angle of the observer.

"It is like the vapor mist."

EVERYTHING is like the vapor mist. Exquisite.


Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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This is the kind of poem that lingers in your soul.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is ever so beuatiful, you did a splendid job on this write.
It's plain and simple and easy to follow.
Wonderful write again, I like your style of writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem electrifies certain colors in my mind- a gray and silver tapestry of something almost like the end of a gentle life, a sweet soul finally completing the end of its cycle, only to make way for yet another beginning- all things have a purpose, as with the simple vapor mist of your poem. This one I think may be one of my favorites of your writings. I wish I could read more

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A beautifully penned write. The type of poem that makes you wonder if it speaks of Autumn or something deeper, like death or even love. Nice work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I can't belive I haven't reviewed this poem, it is intently beautifully written,
as well as the magical quality of insight and knowledge behind the metaphor.
the vision draws the heart to delving wonder in season, as well as the cosmos,
I loved it, keep up the great work.


Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully simple yet eloquently written!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This imagery makes me want to get warm:). Such simple lines,
but good imagery that makes one feel. AD

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


Your poem is as mysterious as birth and death. Who or what is coming and going? Somewhat noisy solidities we appear to be, but quantum physics tells us the "hard little nuggets" of matter, the atoms, are not that at all. Underneath the nugget is a micro-solar system. Underneath the micro-solar system is a mad realm of particle-wave paradox, wherein materiality is merely a TENDENCY, and reality is contingent upon the angle of the observer.

"It is like the vapor mist."

EVERYTHING is like the vapor mist. Exquisite.


Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Well first off your welcome though I'm not sure what I did...

now as for the poem it is very beautiful... I think of someone letting go of a burden that has kept them from enjoying life as hey let it disappear amongst the night sky as the moonlight now shows them it's not as dark as they think.

Very nicely done!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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