F**k You (Or Maybe Something a Little More Clever)

F**k You (Or Maybe Something a Little More Clever)

A Poem by saratogaparty

I give credit

Where it’s due.

Never pick a fight

With anyone that

Knows what’s good

(For them)

 

And I say over and over

To myself that you

Were wrong about me

Being

Just another intellectual

That can “string a few words

Together”

I say you were wrong about

The right way to

Live.

 

Because I know the right

Things to say and how to say

Them.

I know how to get the blood pumping

With those little things called words

That you

(And mostly everyone)

Abuses.

 

So excuse me for thinking

In poetic stanzas.

And feeling the emotions

As they come.

 

Sorry for being just another

Hopeless romantic

That shivers at the thought of

Reality’s morning breath

Being my

Everything.

 

To you I’m just that

Girl

With those

Aspirations

And that curly hair

She can never really

Tame quite right.

Those blue eyes that

Gave her all of her glory

(That she doesn’t

Deserve.)

 

But I am enough, and

I don’t give a

F**k

If you can’t see it

(Or Believe it)

© 2013 saratogaparty


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I always like a piece that has the punch of emotion behind it. As for reviews, I believe that the sole criterion for how good a poem,story or whatever is should simply be "Does it create an emotional impact that involves the reader to the degree that he participates or contributes his own thought or experience while reading the piece" If you have enough technical quality or "technique" then it accomplishes that. Well you have LOTS of that particular thing going on in your writing. it plays on a number of different levels at the same time (intellectual, emotional, literary to name a few). You write very well

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really love this piece, like the way you've structured it and the way it feels as though you are talking to the reader

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really love the vulnerability first of all ... the courage it takes to write self deprecatingly about yourself and to have a bit of ambiguity about it ... I really enjoyed this and I think you're a lovely writer

Richie

Posted 8 Years Ago


Explaining yourself can be impossible.....so, f**k it ;)

Posted 8 Years Ago


You tell em sister! Great write

Posted 8 Years Ago


saratogaparty

8 Years Ago

Aw, thanks! :]
The title has been used here more times than I can remember. Your poem however, shows a lot of creativity. Favorite lines:

Sorry for being just another
Hopeless romantic
That shivers at the thought of
Reality’s morning breath
Being my
Everything.

I think you did a good job on this. Nice writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


saratogaparty

8 Years Ago

Sometimes "F**k You" is just the only thing I can think of where in a nutshell it sums up everything.. read more
 Relic

8 Years Ago

I did and you're welcome.
In this poem (just as in your poem "Flavor") the process of self examination, the
analysis of one's organic structure, becomes procryptic as it conceals patterns
of vulnerability. "But I am enough", which is a wail, which is a loud lamentation
to the glory of humaness. The poet, thinking in poetic stanzas, bleeds too and
f**k you if you cant feel this pain.

There is always so much certainty in your words. A gift of recompense
for your studied talent. In "flavor" you gambled and in the end a 'yawn
was enough oxygin for true happiness.' But in this poem no more bets
can be wagered. F**k it if your can't believe it.

Your amazing..
dana

Posted 8 Years Ago


saratogaparty

8 Years Ago

This one's pretty close to me. It's a matter of standing up after years of chaos and finally being a.. read more
A very in-your-face kind of piece, straight from the shoulder. Effective use of words. This could be a hymn for modern women in my view (but I am a guy so maybe here I am not the best person to say.)
I enjoyed reading this anyway.

Posted 8 Years Ago


saratogaparty

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I'm not sure how all women would take it, but I know I felt very womanly while I .. read more

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Added on February 17, 2013
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