missing me

missing me

A Poem by saroosh

It was another beautiful full moon night
I was drowned in a restless sleep
Suddenly I was awakened by a dream
I stepped into my world, somewhere deep
I saw walking on an endless path, two souls
Holding hands, looking into eyes , two lovers
Then they faded slowly somewhere in the darkness
leaving only footsteps reminding me that its over
and then in another fullmoon night
from another sleep
after another dream
i woke up...you don't think about me much
'cos i am forgettable
but i think about  you all day long
i wonder is it only me
isn't someone out there in the world MISSING ME?




© 2013 saroosh


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saroosh
wrote 4 years back :p

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Saroosh,

Lovely poem filled with great expectations of love but alas only a dream.

Your last line sums up the desperation of a lonely soul - 'isn't someone out there in the world MISSING ME?'

Well written. Thanks for the opportunity to review it.



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Good write! I think you need a pic for this though. (I am very visual).

Somehow I think the font should be changed as well. The color red is appropriate, but the style of font should be different. Maybe more intense to reflect the heart break? Just a few thoughts.

Posted 7 Years Ago


"leaving only footsteps reminding me that its over"

I love this poem and this line especially speaks to me, I know this feeling, seeing the shadows, the footsteps as they slowly disappear leaving not a trace, sitting in the dark watching and wishing...very nicely done. beautiful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Saroosh,

Lovely poem filled with great expectations of love but alas only a dream.

Your last line sums up the desperation of a lonely soul - 'isn't someone out there in the world MISSING ME?'

Well written. Thanks for the opportunity to review it.



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good expression. There is always someone out there for all of us.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, the thing about awakening in a dream has a fascination about itself. Then the concept of an abstract lover (someone out there) increases the pleasure of reading this. Great work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


saroosh

7 Years Ago

thank you :)
Rév O'Conner

7 Years Ago

:)

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