sitting by the beach on an early morning

sitting by the beach on an early morning

A Poem by saroosh

Sitting by the beach
on an early morning
I was disturbed by a fragrance
strange yet resistible
Sitting by the beach
on an early morning
I was disturbed by a voice
polite yet mild
Sitting by the beach
on an early morning
I was disturbed by my thoughts
horrible yet tolerable
Sitting by the beach
on an early morning
I was disturbed by a smile
mysterious yet  friendly
Sitting by the beach
on an early morning
I was disturbed by a person
ordinary yet unforgettable
Sitting by the beach
on an early morning
He & I side by side
Glad yet gloomy

© 2013 saroosh


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Very easy to read poem, full of emotions that are gently portrayed...

lovely poem :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well done. You are definitely interesting to read.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

saroosh'

Amazing. It's like sweet and tart mixed together yet each retaining their originality.

'strange yet resistible' kind of throws me off. What about 'strange yet irresistible'

I love it and I love the colored text contrast for emphasis. It works well with your theme.

Great job. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really liked the feel of this piece. I told a story that was easy to read. Like a sunny day at the beach. Very nice

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very sweet and mysterious. I'm sorry that I don't have much to say about this write. I like how you kept going back to where you were. The sequence you chose was amazing. I agree about the mix of nice and suspension but I also feel an air of peace through all the bad. Just a thought. Nicely penned! Best regards, Dell

Posted 7 Years Ago


saroosh

7 Years Ago

thank you dell!
Very good. I like this peom. I think it glorious. It rymes nicely. It fits together. The poem makes me feel calm and happy. Nice fellings. Its got a mixture of nice and suspenison. Well done

Posted 7 Years Ago


saroosh

7 Years Ago

thank you so much!
Seanh12

7 Years Ago

Your welcome thank you for reviewing Hardship of being an assassin. Your poem was really good
saroosh

7 Years Ago

My pleasure!

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