A Woman

Hated by some,

Loved, but respected, not by everyone.

Cared still for all,

like the roses in her life's garden

expressed not, that could offend any person.

She possessed a heart

warmer than the sun.

a love..not sensed by everyone.

She toiled, and toiled

knew, she could never be a brave man

nor, she could get anything in return.

yet smiled thoughtfully, on being nature's interesting element.

She knew not,  that the world couldn't be anything,

without her mere presence!

The flowers giggled, and nature smiled

the moon grew brighter,

when this fact it realized.

God sighed at this sight,

at women shimmering in delight

going through lots,  still showing nothing but happy & contended  expressions.

He felt proud,

and her immense & unending devotion.

He graced her tons, and hugged her tight

wished her well, Saying:

'Long live ya woman!'

may each block you touch,

dance in delight

Author's Note

Wrote this randomly on this Women's Day :)
Thank-you for stopping by, and going through the poem.
Please feel free to share your thoughts, and rate it too.

(p.s-If there's any editing required, please mail me the corrections. I feel comfortable correcting it that way. )

Happy Writing to you all :)

Sincerely,
Saumya

Reviews

[Norman 223]

After 53 years of marriage (to the same woman) I have no doubts about the qualities that you have expressed. They can be as tough, as they are caring; as dominant as they are compliant, and I wouldn't be here writing , if mothers did not exist.
Your poem has expressed all this far more gracefully than me .
Norm.

[Weeping willow]

Lovely write ;-] Your words honor all that women go through.

[Tabby Mac]

This is a beautiful piece. It is both elegant and inspiring. I enjoy the romantic rhythm to it too. It also reminds me of my grandmother and how graceful she was. It took me many places, very profound too. LOVE IT!!!! Well done!!

[Ruth]

A woman is indeed an infusion of many blends :) Delightfully told...

[Anjali]

An interesting read, this poem about a woman aptly describes about every quality possessed by us.
Thanking you for sharing this piece.

[Pragati Chaudhary]

That's so beautiful.
I am feeling proud and every woman who reads this piece will be honored Saumya.........Loveliest Post on woman's day ever
god bless you

[Leslie Philibert]

The humour of the line about tons shines through, fine irony !

[Thepensiveplayer]

The delicate traits of a woman can be greatly appreciated by a descent guy you're compatible with. Though her trials are never ending, one man will find it worth defending. Excellent work as always and keep on writing. :)

[Quinn W]

I love this poem! I think every woman can relate to it.

[Raven Starhawk]

Beautifully penned. Appreciation for a woman as deep as this indicates a everlasting bond purest in nature. Sometimes it is easy to forget the one who delivered us into this world or the significant other who has stayed loyal throughout the years. Sometimes it takes a tragedy to awaken the truth while others keep it in their hearts and express it as much as possible. Thank you for penning this on Women's Day.

[H L Rose]

“The flowers giggled and nature smiled/the moon grew brighter,”

I absolutely love these lines.

I like how throughout the poem you depict many different elements about women. You depict women as “[possessing] a heart warmer than the sun” in the first stanza, but you also depict the strength of women in the second stanza with “she toiled, and toiled”.

I like how you included many motherly aspects with lines like “cared still for all” and sacrificial aspects in the second stanza when you mention her not “[getting] anything in return”.

I also like your mention of “immense and unending devotion” in the fourth stanza.

I like the flow of the first stanza the best. Every word seems to count and the lines sound good together. I think the ellipsis in the 8th line fits well and is placed in a good spot to evoke emotion.

I enjoyed the read.