For a couple of weeks now

This is a short story I wrote about a troubled child name Jimmy.

For a couple of weeks now, Jimmie's teacher had noticed that he

seemed sad. Worried, she waited until class dismissed one afternoon 

and went over to talk to him. “Jimmy, can I speak with you 

for a moment?” 

Timidly, Jimmy shook his head yes. “I've noticed for the past couple 

of weeks, you've been rather down,” said Mrs. Crane. “Is there 

something bothering you?”

Jimmy looked down at his feet.

“It's alright you know, you can tell me. It will just be between 

the two of us.”

Jimmy looked in deep thought for a moment and then spoke. 

“It's my dad,” said Jimmy. 

“What about your dad?” Mrs. Crane asked. “Is he OK?”

 Jimmy shrugged his shoulders. “I don't know. He's talking to my 

mom a lot.”  

“Are they arguing?” she asked. 

“No,” said Jimmy. “They don't argue. Not anymore.”  

Mrs. Crane looked confused. “Well, that's a good thing, right?”  

“No, not really,” Jimmy said.  

“Well, why not?” asked Mrs. Crane.

“Because,” said Jimmy. “Mom's dead.”  

“Oh,” said Mrs. Crane, taken aback. “Well, I'm so sorry to hear 

that Jimmy.” You know, sometimes, people handle grief differently. 

It probably helps your dad to talk with her. When my father passed 

away, I would talk to him all the time. 

I knew even though he was gone and an angel in heaven, he was 

still looking down on me and could hear me.” 

Jimmy looked up, his eyes were very sad, and for the first time, 

Mrs. Crane noticed fear. 

“No,” said Jimmy. You don't understand.” 

“Well,” said Mrs. Crane in her softest voice.“Maybe it would help

 if you talked to her too.” 

“I'm too afraid,” said Jimmy. “She scares me, I just want her to 

go away now.”

“Jimmy,” Mrs. Crane said. “Are you saying that you see your mom, 

like a ghost, and it scares you?”

“No,” said Jimmy. “She's not a ghost.” 

Even more confused than ever. Mrs. Crane looked at Jimmy 

with concern. “Well, Jimmy,” she said. “If your dad doesn't talk 

to your mom in heaven and she's not a ghost, then what are you

 trying to say?”

Jimmy paused a moment and then spoke.

“Dad talks to mom in their room at night, and I think it's time

 he buried her.”

 

Reviews

[Cryingkate]

I also enjoyed this one. This time You didn't jump out of the bushes and scare me LOL.
You wrote just enough and led me gently ahead to where you were going with the story.
I got to enjoy that I knew where each step was going, so I wasn't afraid. Though the suspense was there just wondering if I was right or not and the journey was a wonderfully, pruned trail of just the right kinda writing.
Skillfully done !
Funny, you remind me of a couple of my favorite story tellers on here. I'm not into stories so you must be extra good and in the big league of extra gifted writers.

[Writergirl]

LOL Thank you!! I appreciate that. Glad you got to enjoy this one without me jumping out of the bushes ;)

[bluessadmood]

This was nice,I changed mood reacting to this many times..how clever.
First you told of some strong grief. .then I thought it was his psyche hit strong..or maybe like her ghost as we see things we love to see..
Many times you changed route and I followed to the very end its a great story and I always said that's how to take a strong control of the readers mind..this was wonderful..I loved this.

[Weeping willow]

Great story,not what I expected at the end,kinda surprised me,enjoyed reading this.Good one.

[Lyingwithlions]

Your stories are great. This one, I had a feeling what was coming and didn't even want to finish. But you had me and I had to. :)

You definitely have a terrific Tallent.

[rickm97]

I'd be very wary of ANY teacher with the last name of Crane, Ichabod or otherwise. I wonder where her husband is.
Now you know why I had my wife cremated.
Nice job.

[Writergirl]

LOL Thank you

[Samuel Dickens]

Marie is right--this is a little gem. Thank goodness he's got Mrs. Crane to confide in. She'll set things straight, won't she? No, maybe not? Heh-heh)

[Writergirl]

Thank you :) Poor Mrs. Crane, quite a daunting task ahead of her. She's probably sorry she asked :o

[Marie]

This little story is a jewel.The last line is perfect.

[Writergirl]

Thanks so much for reading and the review. So glad you liked it!

[Ghazal]

Oh! I liked the ending .....

[Writergirl]

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reading and the review

[garrshaw]

You got me. A little dark humour now and then is good! well done.

[Writergirl]

I love doing the gotcha endings :) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

[Bare trees]

YOW! That caught me by surprise. Somewhere in the background I'm hearing that music from psycho. Good story.




100/100

[Writergirl]

Thank you! I especially love to write endings with a twist. Thanks for reading and commenting :)