Free Fall

Free Fall

A Poem by Aishwarya Subramanian
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Plain imagination.

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An orange blob of mass was sinking,
Leaving its adherence to the horizon
The wind was gently blowing
Lifting my long brown tresses
I looked upon the death canyon
And took upon my daring mission.
I was to jump and fall,
And fall.
Till my lungs would tear apart,
I would scream and fall.
And fall.
My spirit ascended.
I took the plunge, notwithstanding my fear
Of my life so dear.
Through my veins was coursing
A new bolt of energy.
The peak was diminishing
Slow and tardily.
In all this spirit,
I disremembered what came next.
I did not care, I did not scare.
I kept falling.
I fancied failing into an ocean.
But that was too late to wish for, then.
didn't see what was below.
didn't struggle, I just let go.
I let gravity work upon me.
I let fate decide me.
I could feel the difference,
When traversing varied atmosphere layers.
It was hot, then cold
Then hot and then cold again.
I was in a situation
Where feign or pain
Had no meaning or deviation.
I could take down a cloud with me
They looked like whipped cream
In abundance, everywhere and free.
Suddenly, I stopped falling.
I was cohering to a rope that bound me
I had used every bit of the rope
That gave me my life support and held me.
I could fall more but I couldn't.
My little adventure had ended.
Of leveling spirit and free fall.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2011 Aishwarya Subramanian


Author's Note

Aishwarya Subramanian
Haha as true as this experience sounds I've never done sky diving or experienced free fall ever!

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Wow this is truly amazing, I like this. I agree the imagery is wonderful

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow! Great write! Your imagery had me right there with you. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


thankyou so much guys :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Was this inspired by a "falling dream"? Regaurdless, THIS WAS EPIIIIIIIC!!!!! Very discriptive, thoughout, and just, (in a sense) care free. I felt sooooo relaxed when i was reading this. EPIIIIIIIIIC JOB!!! XD

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You've been holding back on me!!!!

This was absolutely epic! The tone is so perfect...hesitant and anxious. Perfectly done my friend!!

You had me from the beginning to the very end. Perfect shape, the title was well thought out, smooth flow and point progression....this was magnificent work! Reading this made me really feel the longing to "free fall" and for a fleeting moment i was trapped into this ingenious web you spun here. I felt sad to get to the end m'dear:)

This was drop dead FANTASTIC...I'm listing you in my favorites Goof:)
MAD PROPS!!!!

Fav line:

"I did not care, I did not scare."

Posted 9 Years Ago


I can feel the hunger to just let go and fall.
This is an interesting read, so emotional.
I can feel this. Very well written.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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