The orchard of Mines

The orchard of Mines

A Poem by Aishwarya Subramanian
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It's a strong feeling that I've had on a number of occasions that I can't recall. I am trying to describe how your pace can be different from the world around you.

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Staring into the face of rush.
Speed confronting like an ambush.
A feeling of solace inside
Intimidated though, while staring outside
Like a stone that is thrown in water.
Still though, as it may seem
The surrounding water begins to falter.
And splatter here and yonder
Furious and in to redeem.
Uncertain the world can be,
Things change before you can see
Irrevocable as the feeling is,
The implicated heart cannot dismiss.

© 2011 Aishwarya Subramanian


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Well written. Great imagery. Keep on penning.

Posted 9 Years Ago


A poem with a lot of hidden story. Life teaches us to appreciate the good things.
"The surrounding water begins to falter.
And splatter here and yonder
Furious and in to redeem.
Uncertain the world can be,
Life is simple. We must learn to be flexible about love and the journey. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


'Irrevocable as the feeling is,
The implicated heart cannot dismiss.'

I love the finality in this line. Leaves no room for doubt plus it accentuates the strength of the read. Rai I like how you hit me with various scenarios which almost all resemble the same thing...the displacement in the persona. The feeling of standing out involuntarily...
The flow was there though i didn't get the second rhyme...sorry (rush-ambush)...
Your words invoke deeper meaning...i like that. A story within a poem :)

Nicely done Rai...write MORE PIECES D****T!!!

~M.Babu~



Posted 9 Years Ago



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Aishwarya Subramanian
Aishwarya Subramanian

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