Painting Over Bitterness

Painting Over Bitterness

A Poem by Michael G. Smith
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Hiding behind sadness

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Painting abstract smiles upon bitter sorrows
Inside crying rivers all the while
Pasting a few skewed rainbows too

Obstructing further the darker view

 

"Oh, I'm alright" goes the standard answer ruse
Talking was never quite my solution thing
And puddles build, body's buried beneath a muse

 

As the inward outward ripples
And the dam continues,... to hold back the pain

Like clouds waiting holding up the rain

 

And then a sunny disposition dares to take the stage
Still, I'm drenched in too much doubt can't seem to dry out
And harder pours the blues floods the rest of day

© 2014 Michael G. Smith


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Michael, I like this. I like the honesty and the beautifully constructed metaphors. Many men find speech and communication difficult. I've come to believe your species is simply hardwired that way. Unfortunately, when life buries your strong silent types in a morass of pain, and communication is the only way out, hiding the pain behind a smile is your go-to strategy. Unfortunate, but very human, and very common. It's just a darn good thing God made us women very persistent. Take care, my friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael G. Smith

7 Years Ago

I don't quite fit the mold of the average male but do retain some of their qualities. I personally t.. read more
Wow...I really connect to this one is such a strong way its unbelievable. The lines: "Talking was never quite my solution thing"- it just hit me so hard because it reminds me of me while I read it. Well really every line touched my soul. You always add such unique twists to your writing. You use your words really in a magical way- especially with the imagery and metaphors and the very descriptive lines that make the reader think and really do keep me interested. I think you write a lot of things people can relate to- and if they can't it makes them think different. This was so well written and the emotion mixed with the pleasant outcome really makes me love it so much. This was a great, great read my friend :D very unique as always. Love it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns

7 Years Ago

It's okay, don't be sorry haha. All is good :)
Michael G. Smith

7 Years Ago

It was the picture. I assumed that was a man and you but you know what they say when you assume?
uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns

7 Years Ago

Oh yeah I can see that. And actually what do they say when people assume?
Great metaphors and illustrations here,nice work:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael G. Smith

7 Years Ago

Thank you so very much.
awesome, but I guess you shoud have it flow smothly afar from chasing rhyming endings. albeit it's a good poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


You're poems are lovely to read Michael, another winner here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Michael G. Smith

7 Years Ago

Thank you. I just did some major rewrites to this.

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Added on March 7, 2013
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Tags: sad, rainbow, rain, puddle, sorrow, smile, hapiness, painting


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