cosmetic surgery

cosmetic surgery

A Poem by audrey horne
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i dont recogni

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I cut out my tongue.
I cut off my hair.
I ripped off my skin, 
thinking that as long as it's gone,
it'll never be the skin that you touched.
it'll never be the hair the you held.
and my tongue lying bloody on the bathroom floor
will never say your name again.

© 2015 audrey horne


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audrey horne
be honest and brutal

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Mac
You have a knack for creating a lot of emotion in a small space. I think that is a solid skill and one that you use to a solid degree.
It makes me think that the speaker hates they are feeling the way they are and they do not want to say more than they have to.
And as the other reviewers have stated, good imagery and power.

The line, "it'll never be the hair [that] you held" says "the" instead of "that"

Posted 9 Years Ago


I really liked this piece. I enjoyed how you description was very direct and that you didn't add any unnecessary details. You just said how the character feels in a beautiful way. Short and sweet.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

audrey horne

9 Years Ago

thank you so much :)
I love this piece! It is simple yet a powerhouse of emotion. I especially love the last two sentences of the stanza, great imagery!

Posted 9 Years Ago


audrey horne

9 Years Ago

I'm glad you like it. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Alex

9 Years Ago

no problem :)
Honest and direct words. You create reasons for the cosmetic surgery and visions of trying to escape the bad places and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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audrey horne

9 Years Ago

thank you for your review coyote!
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
I loved this it's perfect. So dark and passionate with incredibly twisted imagery really fantastic, perfect length more like this please!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

audrey horne

9 Years Ago

thank you so much, your review means a lot to me. i think i will be uploading some similar poems soo.. read more

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Added on February 3, 2015
Last Updated on February 3, 2015
Tags: dark, hair, skin

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audrey horne
audrey horne

Halifax, Nova Scotia, Canada



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