Silk

Is it better to love,

lose

live in the past

life beginning

when you met her?

Or do I care that your hair

Is a lighter hue

or that her beauty and charm

my senses disarm

more completely than you?

And what does it matter

that when we embrace

face upon face

I feel silk,

not lace?

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You have such power with your smoothly constructed poetry Paulo. It simply slips into ones mind in easy smooth consumption. This has such pathos and I relate. The ending of a relationship does not remove the feelings but the change in circumstances one does not control does. Still the feelings are there.

[Chris Shaw]

Beautifully conveyed. Deep thinking about the end of one relationship and moving on to the next. The feelings are still there, moreso if the other party ended it. Silk and lace are both lovely. Just different.

Chris

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahme..]

Wow this is beautiful and yet sharp. Very well written and easy to follow. Kudos!

[Awakened Rose]

Wow. This delighted my senses. So beautiful and whimsical. Thank you for sharing!

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

I would like to see this developed more...more details and feeling weaved into what you already have here.
This is a nice start, but I think the reader may desire more...Just a thought.

[Pól]

That's it, I,m afraid.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Ok, Thanks for your honesty! :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Ok, Thanks for your honesty! :)

[Autumn Dawn Ridge]

I like this one!!! Keep writing.

[Jamie R. Robillard Sr.]

The only thing that bothers me a bit is the scansion. You could tighten that up a bit, other than that a good write.

Thanks for the RR

[ShaDavi]

What a beautiful piece of writing...Love it!

[Pól]

Merci beaucoup

[JanineAAA]

This is amazing, Paolo! You should have been the master of all poems! Good job! :)

[Ashira Macy]

Wow this one was really cool Paulo, and one that you should be proud of. It is hard sometimes to compare loves. It is like apples to oranges. No one will ever been the same as another. Great write.

[Pól]

thanks Ashira- I value your opinion- I think this is my favourite of my efforts- its either this or Strings

[Avinash]

Words spoken out of nostalgia, fantasy and intimate moments will make sense to only those who have experienced bliss of of togetherness. Those leave imprints on your mind so deep you keep revisiting them to make sense out of it. Loved the prose and visual imagery it is cascading. Thanks for inviting.