Life As Ocean~A Poem by NoneOfYourBusiness akaKITTY KUTABAREakaCandyPoleLife as ocean
falling down
submerge
feet first into epic blue
jellyfish, a string of bioluminescent memories around the waist
translucent scales caress a broken shoulder blade
calcify me to the coral
fuse my bones against the bottom
sea shells, pink
come, like whispers
to lay conch swirls of a kiss against the breasts
my hair in waves
floating
a white silk cloud
captures a dolphin’s attention
upright against my body
like a waltz, he spins me a tidal movementcoaxing me to breathe
but I am turning water over inside my lungs
foam between my lips
a slender ribbon opens from a blood bubble breathmy thighs fuse
music curves my spine
a whale on a harpoon above
thrashing in a watercolor sky of oil
peel me
iridescent scale by scale
a starfish melody crawling the sandy bottom
I bend
I open
the center like a fruit
seeds everywhere
a nurse shark opens her mouth
a diamond mask floating in seaweed
I burst
gushing silver water
bleeding starscapes
dreamscapes
curled in a whispering shell
on the bottom
of the sea
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I enjoy the freedom you take by dividing the poem into lines. Your thoughts are scattered yet there is direction overall. You play with the words like a dolphin beneath the waves. I like it -0 }0-
U Posted 14 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
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Oh - This story...
The reader can see vividly this girl with her white-floating hair transform into the gleaming mermaid, can feel her peel open. We wince as she bursts, and we weep as she sinks again, hoping for the dolphin to come revive her yet again. Mystical, watery beauty, and a hauntingly gorgeous tale. Posted 12 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
Oh so you are a mermaid? That explains a lot... seriously the poem sounds like a dream one would have when one is overwhelmed by too many issues at one time. But your imagery and the way you portray it is superb and psychedelic.
Posted 12 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
when the oceans are emptied, we'll still dream about the gentle rise and fall of the fin, the sudden surfacing of a creature that we turn to see but only catch the ripples of the water...this power can also be stilled by iron and steel piercing muscle quivering fibres ... the images you paint are tragic and beauty
Posted 12 Years Ago |
lol yearly revival?? haha love - "bleeding starcapes, dreamscapes, curled in a whispering shell (wow) on the bottom of the sea" - I love the sea and thus poems about it - but a seleney poem beats all others! nice!
Posted 13 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
Wonderful coloUrful lyrical dreamscapes abound in this treasured scribe... from a grain if sand to the pearl that this write became.... Aquaman would enjoy this as did I
Posted 13 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
What a beautiful infusion of the soul with the ocean.
Posted 13 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
I enjoy the freedom you take by dividing the poem into lines. Your thoughts are scattered yet there is direction overall. You play with the words like a dolphin beneath the waves. I like it -0 }0-
U Posted 14 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
beautiful word choices throughout.
i especially liked the line "feet first into epic blue" i also like the way the poem flows Posted 14 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
the sensation of water is magical , however I love this line " music curves my spine " your words curve my imagination ...
Posted 14 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
Oh my god... this is the first piece of your's I've had the pleasure of reviewing, and I absolutely adore it!
Its not often when I am this overwhelmed by such creativity, and talent, you have such a unique sense beauty and all things wondrous, this was more then mere poetry, it was frozen fire, and melting wind. Outstanding! Antonio xx Posted 14 Years Ago1 of 1 people found this review constructive. |
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Tags: sea, aquatic life, echoes, end times, oil spills, over fishing, ocean rape, poetry, selene skye, writer, author, human irresponsibility, the surreal stalks and times of
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Added on July 5, 2010Last Updated on April 29, 2013
Tags: sea, aquatic life, echoes, end times, oil spills, over fishing, ocean rape, poetry, selene skye, writer, author, human irresponsibility, the surreal stalks and times of
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