Naming Girl~

~senryu~

Cradle myth in bones

enceinte with pale moon daughter

father names her fate

 

 

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Reviews

[paul]

great first line
'moon daughter' -beautiful
last line's a mind blower

[Lola Nation]

And mother supports her ... what a beautiful poem

[Bard Constantine]

Beautiful... so much said in so little words. The intelligent mind quivers...

[Kerry O'Connor]

"pale moon daughter" that image is just beautiful. A poem in 3 words.

[ice]

There is "much" about this poem....
...and it does "make (perfect) sense".

The beauty of strict forms is in the challenge to the poet, and the reader.
Beauty is most certainly found here in this senryu.

enjoyed
ice

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

Kaitlynn~ then why don't you ask those who understand the composite of senryu and subtlety instead of dropping a rude little one sentence snippy comment~ or go elsewheres~ thank you for reading~

[Kaitlynn Ronas (Pandora..]

I don't get whats so 'MUch' about this??? it doesn't even make sense.

[Closedown]

What a way with words you have. I am always amazed by what you can produce. And this reads like a fairy tale ready to happen. Fabulous.

[Cafe Reader]

First-class fairy tale!

[Josephine]

wow very short but very moving, I love it!