My Bed

My Bed

A Poem by selkietales

My bed is a traitor,

My bed is my home,

My bed hosts many,

My bed is alone.

 

From clothes to stuffed animals,

To my phone and my nook,

A laptop on one side,

And I squished like the books.

 

© 2012 selkietales


Author's Note

selkietales
Any review is a great review! Just by the way, I never write poetry willingly. Ever. But I wanted to write something about my bed (because I love it so) and the story wasn't working out and I'd just read a really good poem soo... here goes.

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d'aww, no mention of any evil critters lurking beneath and festering in nightmares whilst asleep? That would've been a nice touch, but then I guess that would've slapped the horror genre on this piece which you probably don't want?

Just a suggestion, perhaps you could work more on this and add that little bit of horror at the end to give it a twist, ya know, lead the reader thinking the bed is a place of security and then suddenly shove the horror of cliched night-things of horror down their throats and make them choke with the shock, heh heh heh.
Other than that, its a rather witty piece ;]

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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d'aww, no mention of any evil critters lurking beneath and festering in nightmares whilst asleep? That would've been a nice touch, but then I guess that would've slapped the horror genre on this piece which you probably don't want?

Just a suggestion, perhaps you could work more on this and add that little bit of horror at the end to give it a twist, ya know, lead the reader thinking the bed is a place of security and then suddenly shove the horror of cliched night-things of horror down their throats and make them choke with the shock, heh heh heh.
Other than that, its a rather witty piece ;]

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

cute:) and very relatable. who doesn't love their bed?

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i liked this one:)niiiice

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this it made me laugh but also sad and happy again good work>!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ha nice piece. i love my bed too

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"My bed hosts many"
There's a story there, all right.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cute random poem, seems spur of the moment. I like it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cute. But use your imagination and try to write this as a story...perhaps told from the bed's point of view...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoy this quite a bit.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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