Fat Kid

Fat Kid

A Poem by Sirius King
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i wrote this in my journey to lose a few pounds

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Jus cuz my Mama

Cooked good

Don’t mean that

I don’t look good

 

Short fuse

Attitude

Only friend

Comfort food

 

Mistreated

Misused

Now I have to

Deal with you?

 

The biggest kid in class

Always gets verbally harassed

 

But physically

They wouldn’t dare

They were smart to be scared

Reduced to whispers,
snickers, and stares

 

It’s in my genes!

That’s why  I couldn’t fit in those jeans…

 Damn kids can be mean!

That’s why I had to be mean…

 

Surround sound -Class clown

Everyone heard

 What I had to say

I was quiet for too long

Now it’s time to do things

My way

 

Truly unruly

Bullying the bullies

Not understanding fully

The same thing I’m doing

Is what had been done to

The invisible me

Everything I never wanted to be

 

Best dressed

In high school

Jus to be seen

Everything had to match

And shoes had to be clean

Anybody wearing off-brands

I had to cause a scene

Make sure everyone

Was laughing at them

So they wouldn’t be

Laughing at me

 

Insecurity

 

The route

To the worst

Of these things

Even as an adult

The thought

Still stings

 

In me he will forever live...

 Can’t get rid

Of the emptiness

Of that fat kid


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© 2012 Sirius King


Author's Note

Sirius King
i was 309lbs at my biggest weight, im currently 240lbs...still going strong!



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This was very good, and very touching as well. I can somewhat relate to this. I have had trouble breathing in the past so I was put on some medication and it made me gain 120lbs. Its very hard to lose weight and im very glad that you did and that now you dont have that same insecruity. This is a very great poem and I think that it is very awesome that you lost the weight. Have a good day and keep writing great things like this! Never give up!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

thanx man,
its still a struggle....
but im still fighting the good fight lol
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This was very good, and very touching as well. I can somewhat relate to this. I have had trouble breathing in the past so I was put on some medication and it made me gain 120lbs. Its very hard to lose weight and im very glad that you did and that now you dont have that same insecruity. This is a very great poem and I think that it is very awesome that you lost the weight. Have a good day and keep writing great things like this! Never give up!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

thanx man,
its still a struggle....
but im still fighting the good fight lol
read more
i love this!
so much emotion in this and it's not right to bully somebody because of their weight or looks. It's what is on the inside that counts! Keep up the fantastic work!
'subscribed!


Posted 7 Years Ago


Sirius King

7 Years Ago

Thanx! 😃
When I was younger, I was a little heavier than I shouldve been and my brother who is a year older never let me forget that. Being skinny himself, he teased me to no end. I lost the weight and was now look normal but the insecurity stays somethings. Thanks for sharing ur story, inspiring.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

wow thats great :-)
C.C. Marx

7 Years Ago

u know ur doing good when what u do inspires other, keep it up :)
Sirius King

7 Years Ago

Will do 😀
There is so much raw truth and emotion packed into this poem that I don't even know where to being with the accolades. I think the line that really punched me in the face was "Make sure everyone Was laughing at them So they wouldn’t be Laughing at me..." In my mind, that is the true definition of a bully, and that you understood that was what you were doing, demonstrating the behavior that made you feel so isolated and alone, well, that is growth to the nth degree. Thank you so much, SR, for sharing this deeply personal and poignant piece.

-kimmer

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

wow thanx for checking it out :-)
Fantastic, really fantastic. Being someone who also went through this change of fat to slim I understand what you're talking about entirely. It's almost like you've summed up and explained me in a few lines. Really, really good job.

Only one criticism: The biggest kid in class

Always gets verbally harassed

That line seems quite out of place really; I can't decide whether that's a good thing or not, as it may be because you want it to be profound, although I feel like it lacks the significance to be so different from the rest of the structure. Just a thought.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

thanx for checking it out man!

ok i might have to re-work that line
thanx again :.. read more
wow. your struggles did spawned a great poem. such emotion and resentment through the years of harrasment. its good that u are making the conscious effort to improve yourself. I had a friend that was BIG all his young child and teenage life. Then when he hit the 20's he started working out and looks normal. I was surprised by the transition and he worked hard to get it.
great piece

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

yea its a hard thing to go through
and yes at some point u have to take responsibility
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Dude, are we twins? Like, first you look like my friend Spencer

then, we both are at the same start and current weight

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

lol wow,,,really?
we might be brothers from another mother lol
u never know...
Steven Cash

7 Years Ago

yea, never know man

yea, i was at about 285... I'm about 250, 245 on a lean day
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Sirius King

7 Years Ago

same here,,,
i gotta hit the gym in the morning ugh lol
Know how you feel. I'm a bit overweight myself. I can't help id Mc Donalds is cheap n my mom was too sick to cook n my dad was at work so my brother took me to Mc donalds at points

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

cool man...im down 65lbs currently...its hard but trust me its possible...u just have to put in the .. read more
David the writer

7 Years Ago

Same as everything, right
Sirius King

7 Years Ago

exactly
Great poem man! I know it took a lot to be that honest. I enjoyed it and I think this can help so many of us to face our own internal emotional issues. Thank you for uploading this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

thanx again! :-)
Excellent. You did a very good job expressing what you'd felt. I loved how easily the poem flowed, everything connecting from word to word, line to line, and stanza to stanza.

It's not fun being mistreated and it's easy to release all those feelings on another person (whether they deserved it or not).

You did great. Keep writing! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sirius King

7 Years Ago

very true, thanx for ur comment
Kris

7 Years Ago

You're very welcome :)

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