My Flower

An analogous poem for a personal savior. Completed 2012.

One day I found you

Amongst the golden barley

Swaying in the wind

On that shimmering day in May

Standing taller

Glowing brighter

Angel of vibrant color

And I knew it was you

Pointing me toward heaven

You're a delicate flower

And I'm a gardener without tools

But I'll come and I'll go

Giving you light in the darkness

Giving you water when there is no rain

If you keep on pointing me toward heaven

I'll be your keeper

Oh, those days I came to you

Dressing those deep wounds

Cool breeze at our backs

Gazing eyes in the setting sun

Magical twilight

Grafted branches

Sustenance for my spirit

And I knew it was you

Pointing me toward heaven

You're a resilient flower

And your needs are no longer

But I'll come and I'll go

Nurturing the fruit of our time

Giving what little I have of you

And I'll keep on pointing toward heaven

Until we find our way home

Reviews

[Maja]

This. Is. Beautiful.

This poem gave me the feeling of a delicate sort of love; something that should be nurtured and taken care of. I love the line "pointing me toward heaven" and those last two lines, because love is salvation. This is just really beautiful.

Question though, shouldn't it be "towards"? Because the subject making the action is singular. That's all. :)

[S.A. Kurzweil]

Maja, thank you so much for your review. I am happy that you found beauty in it.

It is funny that you ask the question regarding “toward” versus “towards”. When I wrote the poem, I remember asking the same question on several occasions, as I normally revisit my journal multiple times over the course of several months to perform edits before officially completing poems or other writings. I think the convention tends to vary between regions/countries but either one is actually acceptable and even interchangeable. It came down to preference, despite how trivial an "s" may seem.

Please educate me if you feel differently though. Conventions change over time and vary by region. I’m interested to see if that’s the case. For example, I get hung up the use of commas in a series (e.g. “I write about startups, social innovation and entrepreneurs” versus “I write about startups, social innovation, and entrepreneurs”). A lot of people would say that the last comma is not needed. I tend to disagree but I’m no expert on the matter. It is simply how I was taught and what I am accustomed to.

[Maja]

Well, it is good to know that we are both fans of the oxford comma. I will look it up, but from what I know the s is needed in this case due to the subject. I will research later :)

[Thescientista]

oooh I love the metaphors in this piece. A Gardner with out tools. perfection. And thanks for your lovely comment on one of my poems. =)

[S.A. Kurzweil]

That's very nice of you Thescientista, and I meant it!

[jeannemarie coulter]

really love all of this poem guiding me toward heaven...

[S.A. Kurzweil]

Jeanne, thank you and I look forward to reading some of your writing.

[marcus]

I liked this! Beautifully written!

[S.A. Kurzweil]

Thank you Marcus! I'm very happy that you enjoyed it.

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Isn't that all we need in life? To be nurtured and loved until we reach home... beautiful poetry!

[S.A. Kurzweil]

Thank you FT! I hope to get a chance to read through your writings very soon.

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You are welcome and there is no rush :)

[Cherry Pepperweb]

I really felt connected to this one. Different experiences perhaps but it feels very relatable.
I really like your style. (Check your last line.). :)

[S.A. Kurzweil]

Cherry, thank you for the review, the compliment, and for catching my typo! :)

[Cherry Pepperweb]

You're welcome. :)