Pain

Pain

A Chapter by ~Shadow Kissed~
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Allison can't figure out whats going on as her body reshapes.

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     The sudden pain took my breath away. I stood there numb with fear. What was happening to me? The change I would later learn. At present my mind rebeled aganist the impossible, while the inevitable happened. My muscles tore only to mend themselves into shapes alien to my current form. Somebody help me only there was no one. As the pain increased my bones no longer fit correctly in my body. Thus they changed, elongating and shortening when necessary. Each new wave of pain shook my body as I fought what was happening. My skin shredded as light brown hair forced its way to the surface. My face changed shaping itself into something that in no way can be described as human. When it ended darkness took me.



© 2009 ~Shadow Kissed~


Author's Note

~Shadow Kissed~
it you see some puncuation or spelling that is wrong sorry. I'm bad at that kind of stuff.

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This is a good introduction and I really agree with Rima and Andrew'sWonderland; it definitely makes me want to keep reading. There were a couple of missing commas and several other typos throughout it that could be fixed pretty easily. That may make it read a bit smoother. Aside from that, I really did like it. :) Good write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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dont worry about spelling and puncuation. Im horrible with both the easiest way to fix punctuation is to read it out loud, if you stop for about a short time put in a comma if you stop for a little longer put in a full stop.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is a good introduction and I really agree with Rima and Andrew'sWonderland; it definitely makes me want to keep reading. There were a couple of missing commas and several other typos throughout it that could be fixed pretty easily. That may make it read a bit smoother. Aside from that, I really did like it. :) Good write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great job! It is very descriptive, it pulls the reader in, nice!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Intresting and captivating. I loved the description in this first chapter. Very well written.
"When it ended darkness took me." Would of had to been my fave line. It draws you in, in a way and makes you want to read on.
Great write. Onto the next chapter.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Hmmm...another werewolf story. Hopefully this is more original or you're going to be dealing with Twilight fanatics soon =D

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! Great Introduction, but what a cliff hanger! I rather enjoy the style and indulge myself in the imagery created. I cannot wait for the next installment so that I can find out what happens!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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