Grieve me not

I wrote this after hearing a the heart breaking story of a young woman diagnosed with ewings carsonoma at only eighteen years of age.. She passed away July 16th 2012 at the age of twenty one...

Grieve me not

as I leave this earthly home

and lay me down to rest

I hope you know you're not alone

this is not a final quest

I'll be there in the morning 

when sleep is in your eyes

I'll be there in the wisp of wind

and on the wings of butterflies

I'll be there in the tepid rain

I'll be there on the starry nights

I'll be there in the rainbows glow

and on the hummingbird in flight

I'll surround you with my love

caress you as you sleep

my body is no longer mine

my heart was yours to keep

Please know that I am with you

feel me with your heart

surround yourself with memories

for these do not depart

and when you go to sleep at night

and say your bedtime prayer

I hope you know you're not alone

and that so many care

so I ask you grieve me not

don't stand beside my grave

just raise your eyes up to the lord

and sing his godly praise...

bj smith

aka shallimarRose

Author's Note

critique welcome

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

A tribute piece of a write...hard to define this one...you weave words for her departure and the ending puts this in a positive write:

so I ask you grieve me not
don't stand beside my grave
just raise your eyes up to the lord
and sing his godly praise...

you give her a place and time in a world of mortals...and she has gone to better haven...

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Glen for reading.. Rose

[ron]

This was beautiful Rose. I love it.

[Stevo The POE-t]

Reading this it made me feel as if it was someone I lost close to my heart and they were writing it to me. I think she would be proud to say that you wrote this for her. Very moving piece..

[shallimarRose]

My mother took a copy and hid it away.. I think she wants it read at her funeral someday.. Im glad you liked the feel of this.. xo

[Stevo The POE-t]

Thanks for sharing it

[shallimarRose]

Thank you ron.. I think it is the first poem I ever posted here in the WC

[Keith]

This is so beautiful, an amazing piece. One of my favourites.
...and this
I'll surround you with my love
caress you as you sleep
my body is no longer mine
my heart was yours to keep
... just took my breath away.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Keith.. I actually wrote this when I heard of a young lady only 21 that was dying.. She married her highschool sweetheart in the hospital only days before she left this earth.. I wrote this for her husband, friends and family and posted it in the prayer group I have.. Yes I run a prayer group and an erotica group.. go figure.. lol...Actually the prayer group is much more a part of me then the erotica which I am pretty new too.. Im glad you pulled this one up to read.. xo Rose

[DIVYA]

A very touching assurance of unconditional love. Though physically away, true love is always with us, surrounds us and touches us in every way. Death is superficial, love is everlasting.

Beautifully written. Thanks.

[shallimarRose]

thank you Lady D for taking time to read and comment.. shallimarRose

[Jack...]

Very nice, I have no suggestions that could make this any better than it is to me. Beautifully written and so touching a message.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you my sweet friend.. huggs, Rose

[Veronica Chandler]

Chill bumps come in waves over me as I read this incredible reminder and fitting tribute to those gone from our world far too soon in our thinking. They came and went early, not for their own experience as much as for the lessons made available to those left behind. 21 years may seem such a short span, but some spirits can live 10 lifetimes in a short span while others can experience very little in a long life span. The following lines describe sublime truth,
"I'll surround you with my love
caress you as you sleep
my body is no longer mine
my heart was yours to keep"
Beautiful write...

[shallimarRose]

I do believe this one was a divinely inspired write.. even as I read my own words that you quoted I get chills.. I know not from where this came.. Thank you for your lovely comment Veronica .. shallimarRose

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a great poem for saying goodbye when that time finally comes. A way of letting the people who love you know, that you will continue to be with them just in a different way.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you. I actually wrote this for a friend who lost a very close friend to cancer she was only 21 and married her gradeschool sweetheart only days before she passed.. Life can me so cruel.. thank you for reading.. xo rose

[Poetic Beauty]

Life doesn't always play fair.