Walking Through My Dreams

walking down the path

of a thin winding road
deep breaths
honeysuckle & jasmine
adhere to the senses
........I feel
prisms of color
fluctuate
from bent angles
mirrored
........I see
reaching out
grasping
to hold on
........I touch
cotton muslin flows
as if the breeze could inspire
like a tented soul
encapsulated
........I hide
as if these next few moments
could make a difference
between two worlds
walking up hill
against the wind
I sink into the soft sands
of your warm embrace
I know
they will not
and still
you go walking through my dreams

© 2010 bj smith

aka shallimar

Author's Note

Feel free to comment and critique..

Reviews

[Vikrantsingh]

Wow you added physics/emotions/love and many more things to this poetry. Bravo *thumbsup*
this picture reminds me of two people loving each other under rain - Caught in rain.. my poetry :D
Well Rose nicely penned and I really enjoyed it :)
Great expressions throughout :)
Left me thinking "You go walking through my dreams"

- Singh :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you , I kind of thought you would enjoy this one.. xo Rose

[Lamis]

It feels very mellow yet with a spice melting through it.. Very inspiring, I enjoyed living it!

[shallimarRose]

Thanks for visiting my page Lamees. I am glad you you found this inspiring. It is about longing though wrong for you.. Even though you know the tremendous difficulties you face ahead .. "up hill against the wind" and still you find comfort in the dream of him/her... shallimarRose

[AnnaLeQuinn]

I absolutely loved how everyone of my senses was awakened while reading this. You left me feeling a buzz of calm and serenity. Made me feel like I was by her side. Thank you for being so creative! - Anna

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for reading Anna.. I am glad you felt the whispered calm in this.. shallimarRose

[rhythm&blues]

Beautiful dreamy like imagery, I love the bent angled mirror, says so much. Nicely penned.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you R&B... have a nice evening.. shallimarRose

[Leo Elderkin]

Wonderful detail! I can feel the sultry breezes as the aroma of honeysuckle and jasmine envelop me. Very nice ink, Rose.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Leo... I have been rummaging through my folders to see what I lost when they shut down all the old myspace profiles.. I hope you enjoy the Cafe' Its much more poetry oriented then The other site we are on.. xo Rose Its fine if you call me Barbara... I am siging so many different names now i dont know who I am.. lol

[Keith]

That's gorgeous Shallimar, such a treat for the senses. Mysterious and wonderful.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Keith.. I am so pleased to see you visiting my work.. shallimar

[Clara]

So, so pretty.
While reading, it felt like I was dreaming. :)

[shallimarRose]

thank you again for reading Lola. shallimarRose

[Clara]

My pleasure!

[llala]

beautiful poem with so much detail :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you dear.. xo sR

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is soft, romantic, and surreal...I can smell the honeysuckle and jasmine...
Such a lovely walk in the clouds of your reverie... LOVELY write!

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Robbie.. :)

[Sami Khalil]

A very nice poem...:)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for reading.. sR

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)