Play of Life

Play of Life

A Poem by shallimarRose
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I do write a lot of free-verse though rhyme is my specialty.. shallimarRose

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Serendipity dawns the age,

Reluctantly I turn the page

Alas the mirror does all but tell,

The strains of time I knew so well

And who is there that I can see

Tis not I looking back at me

'Twas not the way the memories told,

I can't remember growing old

The lines of time have since caressed,

Within the sequence of distress

Two glowing eyes with slanting corners,

Now hold the tears of silent mourners

And fortunes told that once denounced,

The written names I can't pronounce

Defy the images I remember,

Surly it cannot be September

For only yesterday 'twas spring,

When all was full of life's renewing

And children small listened so intently,

Beguiling eyes no more than twenty

A summer's song begot from spring,

The  rose to autumn musings sing

As snow caps fill the outer gates,

The scent of winter permeates

The checkered flag draws ever nearer,

And finish line looks so much clearer

For all we do from birth till now,

Is try to win the race somehow

We try to make those extra laps,

And fill the heart with love perhaps

To win the Oscar on the stage,

The play of life the scene of age


©  bj Smith

Aka shallimarRose

© 2013 shallimarRose


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shallimarRose
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For all we do from birth till now,

Is try to win the race somehow

We try to make those extra laps,

And fill the heart with love perhaps

To win the Oscar on the stage,

The play of life the scene of age

Those were my absolute facourite lines in this poem, perhaps because it sums it up in a nice rhythmic way. You took a very traditional and cliche rhyme scheme and turned it into something I couldn't stop reading. It is an incredible poem that would have some emptiness without the rhyming, very good job. I love this


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Thank you Anna.. Hmmm that is the first time I have ever heard rhyme called cliche'. You will get a.. read more
Anna

10 Years Ago

Really? I heard it alot. However i took a bit of an english song writers class in school and they re.. read more



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A very well done extrapolation of youth to age -

'The checkered flag draws ever nearer,
And finish line looks so much clearer
For all we do from birth till now,
Is try to win the race somehow'

(My point exactly - you know what I mean!)
Your rhyme is well done, not too intrusive, and don't ever let anyone tell you that rhyme is not acceptable. (As below). Rhyme is the essence of what poetry IS. Freeform is simply the lazy throwaways
of those not prepared to do the hard yards.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Thank you David.. I was Rhyming before I could speak in sentences so it is for sure a gift I do not .. read more
Beautifully written...in a form that I could not hope to duplicate. Rhyme has just always escaped me in terms of my own writing, so I stick to coloring outside of the lines, though I was chastised for it relentlessly by my professors in college...until the day I graduated and my professor told me "now you know all the rules, go out and break them"...haha

Anyway, I love the imagery in this one. You evoke such sublime intent with your words. Beautifully written and well within your form.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Your college professors wanted you to write rhyme? I have spent a great deal of time being chastised.. read more
Some great rhyming schemes... many people treat life like it is a game... but as the saying goes "he who dies with the most toys still dies."
Excellent work by you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Thank you Cowboy... I am always pleased to see you on my pages.. huggs, Rose
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

10 Years Ago

I am always pleased to be on your page :)
An interesting written journey from start to finish. With age comes the benefits of experience and cherishing what's really important in life as you grow older to become a more fulfilled and wiser person. Great work. A fine write & read. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Thank you Brian.. I am glad you see it my way.. lol... Of course Im on the downhill stretch.. lol hu.. read more
Love poem. A gentle and memorable reminder to pause and enjoy the many changing 'Seasons of Life."
Very well done.
Thanks

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Well thank you poet Doug... I am glad you enjoyed my little tour.. ;) shallimarRose
Oh Rose, this one of my favourites, beautiful clever poem with a delightful rythym. And you do rhyme & meter very well. So glad I don't have to deal with old age yet. Well, I choose not to do so this week anyway. Stay away from those lying bloody mirrors.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Keith

10 Years Ago

Well, yes. But that's not old, is it?
shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

NOOOO... Well I said September.. So early Autumn perhaps? **winks**
Keith

10 Years Ago

Of course, we have so many more laps to do! Early Autumn we'll agree on, I don't want to think abo.. read more
For all we do from birth till now,

Is try to win the race somehow

We try to make those extra laps,

And fill the heart with love perhaps

To win the Oscar on the stage,

The play of life the scene of age

Those were my absolute facourite lines in this poem, perhaps because it sums it up in a nice rhythmic way. You took a very traditional and cliche rhyme scheme and turned it into something I couldn't stop reading. It is an incredible poem that would have some emptiness without the rhyming, very good job. I love this


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Thank you Anna.. Hmmm that is the first time I have ever heard rhyme called cliche'. You will get a.. read more
Anna

10 Years Ago

Really? I heard it alot. However i took a bit of an english song writers class in school and they re.. read more
It seems we are running a race that we are not winning. trying to outrun days that seem to add up unending. Very nice Rose. This is how many of us feel I believe.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

I think so Jack.. I think at the end we just have to hope we played out our best performance in this.. read more
Yes, a play and for the curtain fall we wait..
Your rhyming and choice of words are flawless and again I always feel a hidden melody in your poems.
I'm in love with this one.. :)


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Thank you Lamees for your very nice review.. xo shallimarRose
This is the journey we all take. Little pit stops along the way to remember the curves in the road. It seems we speed up as it goes along! Where has the time gone?! Angi~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

10 Years Ago

Yes time seems to rush by faster the older we get.. It seems the calender pages fly so swiftly now i.. read more

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shallimarRose

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I am a singer, writer, poet, dreamer, believer..... I am an unconventional poet who has been writing rhyme since the age of five. I enjoy all styles of poetry. I write by ear not syllable count .. more..

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