Was It You?

Was It You?

A Poem by shallimarRose


....velvet shadows

once danced on lavender skies

when the glow of a hundred fireflies

quietly lit your face


the Tuscan sun lingered a bit too long

in the silence of your smile

senses filled with heather blues

that seemed to match your eyes


we were younger then

weren't we?


a midnight Sonata

played one last waltz

choreographed by stars

that fell from grace



memories......

written in the sand

washed away long ago

drawing their own conclusions


and I wonder.....

        ........was it really you?



bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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This is a great poem with such beautiful images that brings to mind twilight sunsets and sweet, young romance. The last stanza is especially nostalgic, the wondering of whether the memories we harbor of young love, in fact, every happened, or whether the person we are still with was in fact that person of long ago. Either way, it's a beautiful poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you Karen for reading. I am glad you enjoyed.. xo



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mmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm one who has come to grips with a love that included the passions of youth ..forgiven and free of guilt and shame one can appreciate past loves and lovers .. as persons and experiences that took us to where we are now .. lovely poem .. precious colors and tenor ..fine read for me
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Excellent work, I love the contrasts of emotions in this piece, there's an undercurrent of sorrow and longing

Keep it up :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thanks JJ... huggs!!
This is a great poem with such beautiful images that brings to mind twilight sunsets and sweet, young romance. The last stanza is especially nostalgic, the wondering of whether the memories we harbor of young love, in fact, every happened, or whether the person we are still with was in fact that person of long ago. Either way, it's a beautiful poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you Karen for reading. I am glad you enjoyed.. xo
I love this, especially the first two stanzas, contrasting yet they flow together. The second conjured up a set of eyes from memory :)
Wonderful writing, Rose!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you Que'se I appreciate your coming to read. xo
i felt really peaceful in the images you created Rose, "the Tuscan sun lingered a bit too long

in the silence of your smile", i found this very beautiful... many gorgeous moments have a sad ending but memories remain..

Posted 7 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you Stella for taking the time.. xo shallimar (Rose)
This is absolutely lovely

Posted 7 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you Charisma for coming to read and review. shallimarRose
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You do write from your heart Rose. This was very beautful and sad. I enjoyed it very much.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Ron. Yes I do write from my heart which I often wear on my sleeve. Glad you liked.. read more
ron

7 Years Ago

I have been acused of wearing mine on my sleeve from time to time..xo
shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

I think poets tend to do that even when they try to hide it. Thank you again Ron. xo
I love the feel. That first stanza is something special.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you Elliott..
A dream-like, beautiful, and yet sad poem. I truly enjoy your work.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

Thank you Sharon. xo
That last line packs a punch. Were all those beautiful memories distorted, were they influenced by what we wanted to believe or feel? Beautifully written Rose.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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shallimarRose

7 Years Ago

That poem just kind of came out. Even I am still trying to figure out for sure why that last line is.. read more

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