Broken

Broken

A Poem by shallimarRose
"

Just a confusing poem

"

 

 

traveling the dark corridors

of my own troubled mind

I continue to walk alone

quietly searching for clarity...

 

but pictures have poor resolution,

puzzle pieces are irregular in shape

and unwanted echoes clamor about

until the clutter becomes unbearable

 

blindness seems intentional

 sanity seems to dissipate

in moments of ambivalence

when cries fall on deaf ears...

 

written by bj smith

aka shallimarRose

 

© 2015 shallimarRose


Author's Note

shallimarRose


BROKEN/LINSEY HAUN....sung by shallimarRose

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

boy can i relate to this one Ms. Shallimar ...the seeing inability to "fix" things a-right is reflected in dreams I have ... i love this poem ... its a human condition we don't often write on .. at least so brutally honest and forthright as this one ... glad to have read today ... i don't feel so all alone in me own insanity ;]
E.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

2 Years Ago

Thank you.. for me this piece actually is relates to my previous poems "Raped by a Friend" and "In t.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago



Towering
Have you ever fallen in love with a house? Have you ever fallen in love with your own drafted dream mansion?
Sex Education Day
How archaic notions of sexuality and virginity are foisted primarily on girls.

Reviews

a nice revelation this little poem...we will struggle and struggle to make sense of things, no matter that nothing really makes sense

Posted 2 Months Ago


Your words described struggle and deep thoughts. Somethings we cannot forget. I believe the people who loved us, would want us to be okay. Thank you my friend for sharing your words and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

2 Years Ago

Awww, thank you coyote… its been a long time.. It was actually family and friends who would not wa.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome my friend.
boy can i relate to this one Ms. Shallimar ...the seeing inability to "fix" things a-right is reflected in dreams I have ... i love this poem ... its a human condition we don't often write on .. at least so brutally honest and forthright as this one ... glad to have read today ... i don't feel so all alone in me own insanity ;]
E.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

2 Years Ago

Thank you.. for me this piece actually is relates to my previous poems "Raped by a Friend" and "In t.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

"Traveling the dark corridors

of my own troubled mind

I continue to walk alone."

-Love this!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

2 Years Ago

don't come here much since my mother passed in 2016.. Hard to write now for me... Glad you enjoyed t.. read more
Well written. The descriptive imagery has expressed a lot of emotion. Great job.

Posted 5 Years Ago


There are moments in life when nothing makes sense. We look for our purpose, our direction. I really liked the 'pictures have poor resolution' metaphor, it describes so well what it feels like when we fell confused, unable so see things clearly.

Posted 7 Years Ago


[send message][befriend] Subscribe
ron
Life can do this to us. I have found that sometimes things that happen to us for no aparent reason and makes no sense at the time, will make sense latter in life. If that even makes sense. There are no deaf ears in here Rose.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This comment has been deleted by the poster.
This comment has been deleted by this poetry author.
sometimes life just has poor resolution and nothing is clear...it all seems so broken, nothing fits...and we just find that we are torn between choices,and none of them is good...nice to read you again b.j.

jacob

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This comment has been deleted by the poster.

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

856 Views
8 Reviews
Rating
Added on May 25, 2014
Last Updated on June 11, 2015
Tags: alone, hurt, abuse, healing, broken, fear, confusion

Author

shallimarRose
shallimarRose

F W, WA



About
I am a singer, writer, poet, dreamer, believer..... I am an unconventional poet who has been writing rhyme since the age of five. I enjoy all styles of poetry. I write by ear not syllable count .. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Pay the Piper Pay the Piper

A Poem by s y e


Of Course I Do Of Course I Do

A Poem by s y e