Life's Crossroad

I traveled all way long,
Joining hands with my family and friends,
I traveled in the shadow,
Shadow of others,
In the road that was straight and single.

We had fun,
We had fights,
Even after nudging others
We smiled after a while,
Cause the road was straight and single.

Each had their goal,
They’d clearly set their path,
I never knew mine,
Neither did I bother to find,
I traveled along on the road straight and single.

Then came the time,
Where crossroads had come,
Each had their map,
They traveled smoothly in their path,
On the road that was earlier straight and single.

No one cared, no one asked
If I need a hand to hold and walk,
The time had come,
To make my choice, to choose the path,
From the road that’s no more straight and single.

I realized, I needed to walk my life,
For no more people came along,
For life is never always an easy song,
Its my life, I decided to walk
Away from the road that was straight and single.

Then came a clash,
Clash between my mind and heart
To select the path where I should walk,
I paused, thought and decided to proceed
The crossroad that was chosen by my heart.

Fourth Place

Apr 27, 2010

• Cross Roads
• Life's Crossroad

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

This is such an insightful vision of life, walking down paths together and alone.. making decisions.. choosing what seems best.. So well expressed!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the last stanza in this poem. I am the type of person that says you should always to with your heart and instincts they have a lot to say that we don't understand. The flow of this poem is easy to follow and the words express your complete thought. Great job.

[Dev]

I liked this write alot. It's so realistic and relat-able. I know what's going on in ur head as you write this. Sort of facing the same dilemma.. I dun usually do such a detailed review always but I lliked this alot.. I would like to make my bit of contribution to it's perfection..

3rd para :: I traveled along in the road straight and single... on instead of in
4th para :: Where crossroad had come, .. either crossroads or a crossroad
:: In the road that was earlier straight and single.. in will be on
5th para :: to chose the path, .. "choose" sounds better ..

Hope that helps :)
Good write !!

[Raven Wilson]

I like the reality of this piece.

[Joy Lynn B.]

Very good! Gives a great point! Great piece! =)

[emmajoy]

Life's full of crossroads isn't it, some we arrive at with other people, others alone as you did at the end. You built up your theme so well, and, the end is very touching, emotional, beautiful .. there's nothing like the heart for making certain decisions.

May I suggest you read some English modern poetry to understand meter more, the rythmn of written words. Most of your poem is very good but there are lines that could be shortened or lengthened.

Thank you so very much for letting me share this lovely piece of writing.

[Ambrosia]

Nice! The path less traveled is always tougher but brings brighter rewards. Lovely, well written and flows. Thanks for the read. :)

[Taylor H.]

this was very very good. I enjoyed it. YOu truly deserve the name "Poet's world"

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This is quite good. Wonderful write!

[Doreen]

Life is not an easy song - that is for sure. So many paths to choose when we walk the road. :) Nicely written. This is something many can relate to.