Finally

                     























                        Finally came our wedding day,
                              no more lonely walks
                        on Saturdays nor Sundays,
                               lets swan around
                          like clouds,
                        and wander in joy,
                       our bubbling hearts
                      will sing the yoyo song,
                            for we know
                nothing can lure our pure love!

Author's Note

wrote this poem for albert cafe's 10/40 words contest... i don't know if this is good, but yet gave it a try....

Reviews

[rachielle]

This poem speaks of finally finding the right person and feeling extreme happiness during the wedding. It's the happy ending a lot of us have been trying to find. I liked the idea of the poem but frankly, I find the words a bit forced. Overall though, it was quite a refreshing read. The picture adds up to the happiness. Keep it up!

[Poetic Beauty]

I love this poem about a devotion of love that is strong and true. The poem is easy to follow. Nice job on this.

[MagiCrystal]

Your mind is always good when you penned your soul in this site..A caress with a smile.. I see it.. read it.. love it

[Tovli]

how very sweet. it has a slow, quiet feel to it--yet filled with life and hope. tovli

[Joy Lynn B.]

Wow this is really sweet! 100/100

[JENY]

Good…
But I think….
There are some mistakes…
No Saturdays…no Sundays…I think it is so…
Altogether a good poem….

[Stammers]

Not familiar with the yoyo song, excuse my ignorance.

It's a nice write and a nice read. The word choice 'bubbling' makes the poem. I wanted to hate it but it's actually really clever, 'no more lonely walks on Saturdays or Sundays’ - you've made a modern person with a love story there. I actually think in its simplicity and subtlety it's very good. Quirky I think is the word I was looking for.

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a joyous celebration dancing in your words! The imagery is simply wondrous!

[The Water Queen]

I love the essence of getting married. This is beautiful and Great.

[Aussie]

I like it.Good job.