Stars in my Stud!

Walking around the place with pride,
To become like me, others really tried,
The level of confidence that I had,
Was something I liked and was glad!

I colored my life with the shades from the rainbow,
The happiness of my life, I never let it go
Planted within me the seeds of faith and trust,
Never did I gave room to money or lust…

If you think this is all about you,
Better change your view,
Cause its about me and not just you.

I dreamed of having stars in my stud,
Our love always fresh like rose bud.

I fell in love with none but you,
Lovers like us are rare and few,
They called us a lovely and a perfect pair,
Our pure love spread all over the air..

Your bounty love and care I owned,
Pure love like ours can never be cloned,
Days and years went so fast,
Still our love was deep and vast…

If you think this is all about you,
Better change your view,
Cause its about me and not just you.

I dreamed of having stars in my stud,
Our love always fresh like rose bud.


Vanity Awards ~ Conceited Fool

Jul 16, 2010

• Clouds In My Coffee
• Stars in my Stud!

excellent write

Jul 20, 2010

• little poetry
• Stars in my Stud!

Author's Note

This poem was written inspired from the song "clouds in my coffee"

Reviews

[Bette]

well done...

[JENY]

Intriguing lies…….arouses
Curiosity……exuding confidence in your lines
Really causes some jealous in readers mind….

because it is not possible top all...
an outstanding poem….

[.]

great metered poem and thought provoking.

[Kandy]

Such a nice poem. Romantically selfish. Very Good.

[Phibby Venable]

very wise, refusing to let one be the center of attention,
since love involves two. I like the line, I dreamed of having stars in my stud.

[HorrorMaster]

Very good poem

[Tina Kline]

Very nicely done, it does read like a song and would make a great one, I think.

[Poetic Beauty]

I love the repetavetive line in this poem. I love the story it tells. It gives you a since that this love has gone wrong somewhere but isn't stated plainly. the flow is smooth and the description is great. this poem is wonderfully done.

[emmajoy]

What an outpouring of emotions in this .. and as I see it - just my view, what you say could be interpreted in different ways: hurt feelings deep inside, anger at being questioned, your personal reaction to the thoughts you're expressing and how your words have meanings of their own.

That repeated stanza really adds power to your words ..

[A.Lee]

"If you think this is all about you,
Better change your view,
Cause its about me and not just you.

I dreamed of having stars in my stud,
Our love always fresh like rose bud."

I love those lines. Excellent work. It has a very unique feel to it. Emotional, dream-like, and very poetic all at once. Nice work.