Cook Me

Cook Me

A Poem by ShameemAkhtar

Dab me
in the oil of hatred
And cook me
in the fire of love


Make me a ‘pakora’


Make me
A ‘pakora’


Fry me


Try me


Fly me
in the ocean of dream
Blue sea


Make me a bird
Pluck my plumes
And saddle your head


Denude me
And wrap me
Warm me in oil


Let me soak
the fire of your heart
the cholesterol of your hatred

And make me
the plum of your soul


Douse me


Pluck me


Chew me


But take me out of the fridge

© 2011 ShameemAkhtar


Author's Note

ShameemAkhtar
* Pakora - small cake

... I would rather melt in the heat of your humour and anger than freeze in the coldness of your ignorance...

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i'm going to honest on this peice . the title is good but like the other reviewer said [ Christian Thompson ] on some levels there were parts which i couldn't take seriously but it's an intriguing peice but i think it could be fleshed out more . this could of been a very captivating emotional write but it wasn't and i was slighty dissapointed as i expected something more than what i got -after reading Break The Bottle but i don't know which you did first and if i read them in the right order or whatever but Break The Bottle set the bar really high for my expectations of you . my expectations for you and you're writing have always been sky high as you do execute accordingly to your themes and your messages you want to put across but for me this was a miss . i wouldn't call what i've said negative but more neutral . i'm trying to help you and i think you said on one of your writings , that you don't like re-edit or tweak your peices which i think should change atleast on some levels because i've found with my writings , that you think something is good but when you read over it , you think why did i use that or that's bad which i think you should consider on your part as this poem could use an improvement or a sweep but it's a creative peice i'll give you that but i do understand that all poems as with books generate positive/neutral or negative reviews which is going to happen isn't it because it's reality and everyone has there opinions and obviously not all poems or books[whatever ] or going to be as good as the first or as good as the last but there's always room for improvement and i know you might be comfortable with what you have done but you asked me to review this peice and i have so it would be pointless in not intaking any of my tips .

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like it but i am fairly confused about what emotions are being portrayed here. It is also quite confusing to me because i don't know what kind of message you are trying to convey here either.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I thought that pakora was a Hindi dish of chicken and vegetables, I'm unfamiliar though with it but dishes tend to vary depending on where you are in the world (there are varying forms of lasagna, my personal favorite being Pastitsio...oh nom nom nom.)

I find it a very clever way of depicting desire, invoked the image of being in the kitchen working at a five star restaurant, a poem for the sous-chef from an admiring coworker. I think its brilliant and very unique in context as well as form.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Your imagery is frying my soul to say the least. And that's a great thing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


i'm going to honest on this peice . the title is good but like the other reviewer said [ Christian Thompson ] on some levels there were parts which i couldn't take seriously but it's an intriguing peice but i think it could be fleshed out more . this could of been a very captivating emotional write but it wasn't and i was slighty dissapointed as i expected something more than what i got -after reading Break The Bottle but i don't know which you did first and if i read them in the right order or whatever but Break The Bottle set the bar really high for my expectations of you . my expectations for you and you're writing have always been sky high as you do execute accordingly to your themes and your messages you want to put across but for me this was a miss . i wouldn't call what i've said negative but more neutral . i'm trying to help you and i think you said on one of your writings , that you don't like re-edit or tweak your peices which i think should change atleast on some levels because i've found with my writings , that you think something is good but when you read over it , you think why did i use that or that's bad which i think you should consider on your part as this poem could use an improvement or a sweep but it's a creative peice i'll give you that but i do understand that all poems as with books generate positive/neutral or negative reviews which is going to happen isn't it because it's reality and everyone has there opinions and obviously not all poems or books[whatever ] or going to be as good as the first or as good as the last but there's always room for improvement and i know you might be comfortable with what you have done but you asked me to review this peice and i have so it would be pointless in not intaking any of my tips .

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem is captivating, to say the least. I am intrigued. There is so much turmoil in this. It would be interesting to see a lighter side of your poetry. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Oddly worded .. Not certain of your wants or intentions .. hummm ..

Have Joy .. Jasmine

Posted 9 Years Ago


hahahaha !!!! pakora ??? hehehehe !!! oily !! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


there are definitely 2 extremes to loving someone. you obviously are aware of and embrace them! the madonna and the w***e within us all thanks you for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


This bears resemblance to one of your earlier poems I think.. can't recall the name now.. having said that I think it was a nice effort on your part.. the topic of hatred could have been addressed differently, but again this is a new way of approach.. it was an interesting read

Posted 9 Years Ago



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ShameemAkhtar
ShameemAkhtar

Port Louis, Mauritius



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