comet tail

comet tail

A Poem by ShaneBerry
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a poem about a dream i had for fifteen nights.

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Comet Tail: Part I
              by:Shane berry
her black eye was swollen,
my heart was racing like i was awake.
i knew it was a nightmare, but i called it a dream.
cuts and guns, knifes and bruises.
life and death, love and hate.
he shouted, i fought.
she screamed, i defended.
he was faster than i had ever seen anyone strike.
i was hitting him dead on.
he pulled out the metal gun.
my breath is taken, my stomach sinks.
blood shoots out of my back.
i fall to my knees,
there is no emotion in my face.
he begins to walk, i stand, blood, 
blood, is everywhere.
i leap.
he aims, 
i grab,
he shoots
i smile.
he missed.
i turn the gun to his face with a laugh i end his life.
by his hand.
i drop to the floor, 
she runs to my side.
Alexa
she stares into me, like i'm a door.
the blood is red
crimson
violent.
love.

© 2010 ShaneBerry


Author's Note

ShaneBerry
all i can do to try to understand the dream is turn it into a poem. how is it?

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Wow...such motion in this work. Volatile and dark...Very powerful write

LW

Posted 8 Years Ago


Good write. Chivalry is not dead. Fighting for love at the greatest cost.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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wow love it...the visuals you create are vivid! loved the one lines in the middle, gives it added tension. great poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


Nice visual's and creates a fast paced scene of hand to hand combat. In the end he ends up the winner and the injured lady. Nice poem!
Life and Light!
TT-TTO-NI-K
Elk

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love it! Dreams are great to exorcise! lol
Excellent flow to this, sounds an intense dream love! The dream seems indicative of someone aiming to take control of a situation, trying to be heard, not invisible!
Awesome
xx


Posted 11 Years Ago


Very intense! I loved it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


you really painted a picture here. i like this one. vivid emotions.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Repetitive dreams often have important meanings. To me, you dreams has a message telling you to fight for something you love, something very important. Your poem is very well written and I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


dream is surely very violent but the poem is as beautiful .

Posted 11 Years Ago


This dream is frightening, but the poem is amazing. You did a great job with this.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on February 22, 2010
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Tags: comet, tail, dream, interpretation, love, war, fight, kill, murder, kidney, transplant, alexa, heart

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ShaneBerry
ShaneBerry

denton, TX



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My Chemical Romance “The Ghost of You” Name: Shane Douglas Berry Age: Born on 8/4/1992 Hair color: Brown Eye color: Green Skin color: White, Freckled Tattoos: Oroborus (red, center.. more..

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