comet tail

comet tail

A Poem by ShaneBerry

a poem about a dream i had for fifteen nights.

Comet Tail: Part I
              by:Shane berry
her black eye was swollen,
my heart was racing like i was awake.
i knew it was a nightmare, but i called it a dream.
cuts and guns, knifes and bruises.
life and death, love and hate.
he shouted, i fought.
she screamed, i defended.
he was faster than i had ever seen anyone strike.
i was hitting him dead on.
he pulled out the metal gun.
my breath is taken, my stomach sinks.
blood shoots out of my back.
i fall to my knees,
there is no emotion in my face.
he begins to walk, i stand, blood, 
blood, is everywhere.
i leap.
he aims, 
i grab,
he shoots
i smile.
he missed.
i turn the gun to his face with a laugh i end his life.
by his hand.
i drop to the floor, 
she runs to my side.
she stares into me, like i'm a door.
the blood is red

© 2010 ShaneBerry

Author's Note

all i can do to try to understand the dream is turn it into a poem. how is it?

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Wow...such motion in this work. Volatile and dark...Very powerful write


Posted 8 Years Ago

Good write. Chivalry is not dead. Fighting for love at the greatest cost.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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wow love it...the visuals you create are vivid! loved the one lines in the middle, gives it added tension. great poem

Posted 11 Years Ago

Nice visual's and creates a fast paced scene of hand to hand combat. In the end he ends up the winner and the injured lady. Nice poem!
Life and Light!

Posted 11 Years Ago

I love it! Dreams are great to exorcise! lol
Excellent flow to this, sounds an intense dream love! The dream seems indicative of someone aiming to take control of a situation, trying to be heard, not invisible!

Posted 11 Years Ago

Very intense! I loved it!

Posted 11 Years Ago

you really painted a picture here. i like this one. vivid emotions.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Repetitive dreams often have important meanings. To me, you dreams has a message telling you to fight for something you love, something very important. Your poem is very well written and I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 11 Years Ago

dream is surely very violent but the poem is as beautiful .

Posted 11 Years Ago

This dream is frightening, but the poem is amazing. You did a great job with this.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on February 22, 2010
Last Updated on February 22, 2010
Tags: comet, tail, dream, interpretation, love, war, fight, kill, murder, kidney, transplant, alexa, heart



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