The Soldier And The Boy

Before Cliff, Oren And Rick Siege a village.

He jumped over the fence, 

His blade shining in the moonlight,

He was followed by his student, Rick.

They said. Not a word.

They had to be ghosts,

Get in, 

Get out.

don’t be seen,

don’t be heard,

don’t get followed.

Kill anyone who sees

Hear, 

Or follows.

Oren looked back at Rick,

“are you ready?”

Rick nodded.

He prays to his blade.

That he hoped he would never have to use.

The soldier, and the boy entered and left, 

Without anyone knowing.

Author's Note

lol one of a few before the cliff stories

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel of danger told in this poem. The poem was direct and the boy knew what must be done. A good ending to the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Luna Northstar]

Another great job. Nice write.

[Dutch Jr.]

before the cliff.... a good idea, and you set the scene well, on a mental level, though. I'm a fan of this piece.

[alesuriko]

I like this. Normally I don't read stories requested to me but the fact that you had Zack in the preview image hooked me in. (Final Fantasy is my favorite). I really like this although I couldn't get the image of Zack and Cloud out of my head as I read this. Good start though, very smooth in the plot and setting. The grammar could use a bit of work, especially with punctuation. But overall I liked this. I particularly liked the part with "Get in, / Get out. / don't be seen, / don't be heard," really great flow and a classic.

[Ruth]

"He prays to his blade."........I love the imagery of this line!
An amazing poem that could lead elsewhere!
xx

[Chronos]

i feel that this may be a great start of a good story i like how you describe the moonlight

[Sasha]

I like this. It's short, but paints a very vivid picture of what's going on.
"Get in,
Get out.
don’t be seen,
don’t be heard,
don’t get followed."
was the best part for me. From the shape to the brief and effective reptition. Good job, Shane.

[MiidniightSoul]

Very good. I love all of your work ^^

[snapjack]

Ooooh, I didn't read this one first, but now it gives me more background to it. Cool use of irony