Deathless Dying

Painless pricks that kill you slowly

Faceless shadows that say they're holy

Hate with out caring

F**k, just keep staring

Speak in a whisper, don't make noise

Lean over crying while keeping your poise

Distant laughter fills the room

Pointless pictures of darkened tombs

Tell me I'm crazy, but not too loud

Look at me funny with out drawing a crowd

Empty heart tells you a lie

Secret smile makes you die

Reviews

[Mia]

You were fourteen when you wrote this, that's crazy! This is awesome.

[b.platte]

haha yup. Thanks!

[x_ranger]

This is an interesting piece. I can only imagine what must have been on your mind that led to these words. Nicely done.

[b.platte]

Lol yeah. I wrote it in church when I was 14, so who knows what sorta angst I had going on then. Thanks for your review :)

[Kelsey]

Your writing is amazing. Again, great job. :)

[b.platte]

Thank you

[Amethyst Rose]

Must say, I really enjoy your writings.

"Empty heart tells you a lie
Secret smile makes you die"

But also the first two lines were awesome.

[b.platte]

Thanks! I'm glad you like my work :) always love hearing things like that!