Save Me

Save Me

A Poem by shayne
"

A bit of a dark, angsty one :)

"
Touch me, hold me
Tell me this is real
Pull me up, warm me
The shivers
Won't make me stand still

The darkness
It's roaming
Threatening my defeat
It's eating
Right through me
And I couldn't make my wounds heal

Forgive me
For madness
For the wrongness I've become
Save me,
For I can't save myself

© 2010 shayne


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

wow i loved it! it's short but it gives plenty of emotion. i liked then end when you stated "For the wrongness I've become-Save me, For I can't save myself" that is true and i can really relate to that. i'll give you 100 just because i relate to it lol! keep it up i like to read more!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




Reviews

I really liked this poem and i'm sort of an expert on dark angst :). The only critique I have is that the line "And I couldn't make my wounds heal" sort of veers away from what, otherwise, is a very nice flow.
kat

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow i loved it! it's short but it gives plenty of emotion. i liked then end when you stated "For the wrongness I've become-Save me, For I can't save myself" that is true and i can really relate to that. i'll give you 100 just because i relate to it lol! keep it up i like to read more!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

175 Views
2 Reviews
Rating
Added on January 22, 2010
Last Updated on January 22, 2010

Author

shayne
shayne

Manila, Catholic, Philippines



About
Well, I'm 22 and a medical student. I don't consider myself a good writer but then, still someone who loves doing so. In a way it feels like a release, a way to get back to my center. It's a way to co.. more..

Writing
Stranger Stranger

A Poem by shayne


Bearing It Bearing It

A Poem by shayne