Spring Array

Playing around with some form this time. This is two 3-6-9 poems, meaning 3 stanzas, with 3 lines each, the 1st line 3 syllables, the 2nd 6 syllables and the 3rd 9 syllables. Hope that makes sense...

SPRING ARRAY

I.

Lilacs fall

In lavender clusters

Petals strewn on spring sidewalks and streets.

 

Wildflowers.

Fiery red poppies sway

On mountain paths and in forest deep.

 

By the sea,

Carpet yellow and mauve,

Delicate blossoms under our feet .

 

 

II.

Waves touching

Shore, tumble over rocks.

Yellow, pink buoys bobbing on the sea

 

Water hits

Your body, a cold slap

But then slowly releases; you’re free

 

To savor

Calm waves caressing you

With a soft May kiss, it’s all you need!          

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Hope you enjoy it

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Enjoyed ''Spring Array'' so much - both in content and form. Have tried to use form, but am hopeless so can only imagine how hard you had to work to achieve the necessary accuracy along with such graphic sights. Think you're a natural!

' .. By the sea, - Carpet yellow and mauve, - Delicate blossoms under our feet . ' And your last word at phrase end, sounding as should. ' How lovely is that1

Take care, keep safe - have a lovely weekend, Sherri.

[Sherri Moshman Paganos]

Thanks so much Emma for your generous review...but I've seen you do form well! Enjoy your weekend,read moreThanks so much Emma for your generous review...but I've seen you do form well! Enjoy your weekend,
S.

[Einstein Noodle]

awww I like it .. your poem drew me in delicately .. enjoyed the tempo and rhyming is solid, says i! especially felt the ocean's waves, cold slap and calm ... i heard the seagulls calling! the world of flowers and colors are nicely painted .. very much enjoyed!
E.

[Sherri Moshman Paganos]

Thanks Einstein, loved your comments. I was determined with the rhyme! And yes, as spring rolls into summer, seagulls are beckoning...

[mattavelli]

Hello, Sherri! :)
I really like number II. Its a great scene, with motion and that relatable "cold slap". The last time I went into the ocean was my son's first time in. It was cold and he was excited. What other forms have you written in?

[Sherri Moshman Paganos]

Thanks Matt for the review. Yes, always that initial cold shock...actually I haven't done much with form, except for a few sonnets here and there. Not too successful...I enjoy your form-filled poems.
S.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Very much a nice spring morning for me to read these...

you created a garden of poetry here.
j.

[Sherri Moshman Paganos]

Really enjoyed your comment Jacob, thanks.
S.