A Farewell

A Farewell

A Poem by Augustus

These crumpled petals linger, dry and frail
A brittle souvenir of days long past
Their rosy perfume lost, the odour stale
A memory too afraid to breathe its last

For it was Spring back then, and butterflies
Could serenade the dew on blades of grass
And under Helios' watchful eyes
No semblance of a shadow could trespass

'Twas emptiness for me, despite the bloom
A distant song of chirps, and twittering
No feathered touch, no variegated plume
No love, for it was someone else's Spring

I wish that Rose may never bloom again
Nor should the old clock sound its backward chime
My vessel I have wrecked on rocks of pain
May it be swallowed whole by seas of Time!

And so I give my petals to this breeze
And may it take them swiftly where it must
Some burdens carried long, can only cease
To be; when moments crumble into dust

© 2013 Augustus


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This is a famous poem to me already ;-) I once remember my sister quoted some of your lines... and she's right, this is a perfect piece of true and beautiful serene poetry my friend... so rich, and filled with gorgeous metaphors, of nature, and the love and pain hidden in between it.
Fantastic writing here... saved....

-Elisa

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Elisa! You made my day!

6 Years Ago

The pleasure is all mine my friend. I will be back for more of your pieces.



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To say that this poem is one of the finest I have ever read by anyone wouldn't be overstating it. I was introduced to your poetry by Abdul Aziz a long time back when he had shared the "Bifrost" with me. I loved it. But this was something else entirely. Every line was drenched in perfection which made me feel that all that could have been conveyed was conveyed. A farewell couldn't have been captured in better words than these. And though I tried I failed in expressing the feeling that this poem exudes, and therefore, in giving it an appreciation it deserves because the poem is simply self-explanatory and complete. Perfect. I read it again and again. Looking forward to reading more of your poems.

Regards,
Adarsh

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the accolades Adarsh! I am especially pleased that this poem made such an impa.. read more
Oh this is so sweet, yet holds that sad undertone. It is great in a sense of imagery, while reading through the poem I could see the different lines with crisp accuracy.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Katie!
Hi .This piece sound like some old sailors song.
"Nor should the old clock sounds its backward chime
My vessel I have wrecked on rocks of pain
May it be swallowed whole by the seas of time! 'tis my favourite piece..
Each stanza has its own message ,but all link making it a fine piece of art.God bless

Posted 6 Years Ago


Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Rose of many colours

6 Years Ago

You are wecome..God bless
It´s captivating, and filled with passion

Posted 6 Years Ago


Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you!
This somnolent song aches with memories past. The tonality of it weeps with a finality that never ends.

The format, the rhyme, and meter are all perfection, whose substance leaves an echo in my soul.

Linda Marie

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Linda!
Linda Marie Van Tassell

6 Years Ago

Thank you for being, that I might linger in your words.
Augustus

6 Years Ago

You do me a great honour. :)
"For it was Spring back then, and butterflies
Could serenade the dew on blades of grass
And under Helios' watchful eyes
No semblance of a shadow could trespass"
Thank you for the good journey in your words. Each set of lines leading the reader to thoughts and vision. I like the above lines. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you Coyote!
Absolutely beautiful! Your poetry is marvelous and I'm certain it's on its way to become a well-beloved and timeless classic. Wonderful work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Augustus

6 Years Ago

Wow! I am honoured. Thank you!
Gleb Zavlanov

6 Years Ago

It was my pleasure.
Augustus!

Wow, this is beautiful my friend. I have read a few of your poems and all are excellent, but this is as fine a piece as we find on WC, and that is a high mark.

This is getting the highest rating I ever give: 98/100. The mark of 100/100 is impossible since no poem is perfect, and I am still searching for a 99/100. So I rank this as among the top dozen or so poems I have read on WC.

There are many nice passages in this poem. And I agree with Robbie that the last stanza is among the finest, but I rate it number two. To me this is the amazing set of lines:

"I wish that Rose may never bloom again
Nor should the old clock sound its backward chime
My vessel I have wrecked on rocks of pain
May it be swallowed whole by seas of Time!"

as these lines encapsulate how lost is your spirit, how devastated. "I wish that Rose may never bloom again"--what anguish. "My vessel I have wrecked on rocks of pain"--what hopelessness for a solution and recovery. "May it be swallowed whole by seas of Time!"--what abandonment and resignation to disaster.

This is a wonderful piece of writing. I am very glad to have read it.

Kindest regards,

Rick

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Wow! The fact that you rank this one in the top dozen that you've read here is a great honour for me.. read more
Rick Puetter

6 Years Ago

There were some simply wonderful passages here, Augustus. Your writing is always good, but this was.. read more
"'Twas emptiness for me, despite the bloom" You are such a talented writer and this poem speaks volume of your craft. Excellent blend with the metaphors, love and goodbyes. Truly.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you Joshua!
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I have had the feeling of farewell lately, on my mind, so reading this poem was a good choice, I do think.
This was a lovely poem of farewell and changing and how times eats away at things. I really enjoyed how you carried the petals throughout the poem, letting them go only in the last stanza.

Well done!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Augustus

6 Years Ago

Thank you for your perceptive review!

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