Ode to a small lump of green putty I found in my armpit one midsummer morning

Please read the Author's Note before reading the poem... :) And yes, THIS IS NOT BASED ON A TRUE STORY!!!!

You were a hidden entity
Under my own ignorant arm
An object worthy of pity
Devoid of beauty and of charm
For green and gooey gobs of goop
In shame their shapeless heads must droop
And though you cause no hurt or harm
It is your lot to stoop

Personifying all that is gross
The epitome of repugnance
No arms outstretched to hold you close
A mere tainted remembrance
Such grief if beauty slams her door
And left to cry for ever more
Why crave though for her indulgence
And destiny deplore?

Perfection is a conjured brand
Of man's insatiable greed
By loathing for what is at hand
Craving for what he does not need
All things are one in God's abode
Or He would not have made a toad
Or spared thoughts for a millipede
To detritus erode

O spare no thought for human scales!
Your life was never theirs to give
Dispel your muted screams and wails
And learn with pride to breathe and live
For who knows if an angel snores
Or under wings he contracts sores?
His hallowed heart grows not pensive
But peace and calm it stores

Author's Note

This was inspired by an allusion to a fictitious poem of this name in Douglas Adams' "Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy"...I was so tickled by the title that I simply had to write this poem! :)
So this one must go down as a semi-mock ode...because in addition to acknowledging Douglas Adams' satire, I wanted to show that a serious ode can be written even on as absurd a topic as this... Please give honest views on how it went... :)

Reviews

[thedaydreamer]

Wow... Wow... Awesome.

Such an intelligent write. A perfect construction of words which rightly can be called an Ode. "And destiny deplore?" "To detritus erode "... magical construction. Very symbolic, very positive and should I say it again very intelligent write.

The inference to "small lump of green putty in my armpit" sets a humorous, satiric tone, the second paragraph asks the reader for a reality check of the beauty-ugliness conundrum. The third paragraph is the most classic of them all.

"Perfection is a conjured brand
Of man's insatiable greed
By loathing for what is at hand
Craving for what he does not need"

Perfect lines. And the final paragraph concludes saying there's no use in wasting time in these insatiable chores, instead be the one you want to be. In totality- this is a complete Ode.

Looking at the poetic side, the sentences such as "For green and gooey gobs of goop" set a great tone of alliteration, making reading the ode a fun ride. The words used are just perfect.

The only thing that I can question or advise (if I am eligible for that) is that instead of putting the reader to know what to do, in the last paragraph, why not to put the whole scenario in front of him and ask him to choose his life himself. The poem is itself about the individuality that everyone of us must possess, so why force this up ?

Sorry friend, but I am totally bowled over after reading this piece of writing and all this, that I have written is a result of this fit.

Dear friend, I have also written some amount of stuff which they call poetry, so please give me an honest review from your side. I will feel proud. And honestly, this ode is above any commentary.

Awesome. :)

[Ridhima Tewari]

Nice work...
Intrigued by your old-world-charm of a vocabulary... :)

But I wouldn't call it a semi-mock. Its mock all the way I presume, even though there are strands of serious themes like Creation and the meaning of Beauty.

Nice nonetheless! :)

[neo]

wohhh tats a really good one... i was amazed tat u cud write an ode on such a topic.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I loved the book HGTTG, the movie didn't do it justice. Do they ever? I loved the classical feel to this because considering the title and subject matter it was a stroke of ingenius wit. I'm an admirer of well written satire; particularly in poetic form. One of my favorites is by Jonathan Swift, "Verses on the Death of Doctor Swift", I laugh every time I read it. Favorite lines here, "All things are one in God's abode/Or He would not have made a toad" and "For who knows if an angel snores
Or under wings he contracts sores?" I got a hearty grin from both of those couplets. Well done.

[la Abeja]

:-D
This was great!!!
At first I thought it would be a little disturbing but I love how you twisted it into something amazingly metaphoric.

"Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy" is one of my favorites. Although, I've only seen the movie that was released here in the states several yeas back and listened to a couple of the radio segments that a friend on mine had.

Thank-you for sharing
Stacie

[Abdul Aziz]

Lol, Adams would've been proud!

Perfectly written "semi-mock" ode! It is amazing that you've managed to write on something as repugnant as this!

"For who knows if an angel snores
Or under wings he contracts sores?"
Awesome lines!

Another very well written poem bro!