IF ONLY.....

You all must have that one person....giving you,your fair shares of "if only"s! Well,here is mine...;)

From the beginning of the day

 

To the very end!

 

All I think about is you...

 

While twisting and turning my strands

 

If only...

 

You would know my name

 

 

All the time I look out for you

 

For your mere glance...

 

Helps me forget all my miseries

 

And hence I wouldn't miss a chance

 

If only...

 

You would look at me once

 

The very thought of you interests me

 

Me and you, that's what I fantasize

 

I wanna map my whole life with you

 

To be together, I can pay any price

 

If only...

 

You would know I exist...

 

 

Reviews

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!!
very passionate sweet and romantic.........
it is safe to say that everybody has or will experience this at some point in their lives.....
very well written......
beautiful poem...
i loved it!!!
:)
p.s. there are some editing errors........and may i suggest experimenting more with the fonts according to the thoughts conveyed.......

[Shweta Shah]

thnks a lot for your honest opinion!
i tried to re-edit it...still if u find any...feel free to tell me...
i vl try to change the fonts too for my next poems.

[Ovi-Odiete]

Such an awesome poem...
Engulfed in Possibilities that never seemed possible...
Great Piece.

[Shweta Shah]

Thank you so much!!!

[MadalaJose]

keep up the good work. would love to read more of your poems

[Shweta Shah]

Thank you so much Madala...
Sorry, though!
I have been inactive for a year now!

[MadalaJose]

Sweet. Romantic. Lyrical. Sincere. I know right, there is always that person. you tryna draw their attention but they are busy, too busy to see you. I like it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Dreams and wishes. Leave us hoping and dreaming. I like the inner thoughts and wish. I did like the question at the end of the poetry.
Coyote

[Shweta Shah]

Thanks a lot!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Saddam]

It is micro and lovely feelings .
I love it.

[Shweta Shah]

Thank you so much!
I am glad you loved it.

[Kajal Sharma]

that was highly romantic....i really like how simple and to the point it was....great job

[Shweta Shah]

Thanks a lot!

[Eliot Knight]

I will give my honest opinion and hope I bring no offence to you.
My biggest concern is the font. It really bothers me that its huge...that's a personal preference I suppose, but it really makes me not want to read it. I'm not sure if others feel the same way.
You did not ask for any corrections but you did ask for a review so here are my thoughts on your work.
Unrequited love (infatuation) is a very powerful thing and it gets to the best of us. I do think you should put more effort into writing unless you are only letting your feelings out. Then it's fine.
Again, I apologize for being blunt.
Thank you for asking me to review it, that you deemed me as someone worthy of such an important task. Writings are so personal and I am flattered that chose to share that with me.

[Shweta Shah]

None taken!
I am grateful for your honest opinion.I didn't know fonts could be this chaotic.
For the writing part,I just penned what came to me,be it feelings or thoughts,whatsoever,you name it.
Any suggestions,corrections or reviews are appreciated.I would like to improve it if possible!
And no need for apologies.Thanks again for the review.

[Eliot Knight]

Yeah, writing is an art form and art is based on aesthetics. Writing for me is what a painting will be for an artist.
The difference between a non-writer and a writer is how you emotions, feelings etc across, how you describe events. Anyone who is literate can write in a diary, you must make it beautiful.

[Shweta Shah]

True that!
I feel the same and agree with you.
I have also changed the font size as you suggested.
If any further changes are required, I am all ears!

[Eliot Knight]

Thats great ^_^ Im glad you took it into consideration :)

[Indra Neil]

Feelings, thoughts and emotions are beautifully conveyed in this fine write! Well done!

[Shweta Shah]

Thank you so much!

[Indra Neil]

You are welcome!

[Anuj kaushik]

You have transformed the most romantic time of being in love into words. I was thinking how to define that time in this review but couldn't. very nicely written.

[Shweta Shah]

Thank you so much!
It means a lot.