i Want

i Want

i want your eyes to speak as

hands that grace lilting southern magnolias ...a

tensile tenuto .... a

leaving of finger tips  stars tracing

i want

hot cocoa and ground red pepper

your hair alive with

emeralds  streaming seaside pearls

that sacred place

i want 

breath to my life 

and drinking

each from one dawn to another

impaling our thoughts ..........a

soul quenching,  wanting  thirst 

i want you.

E.

11/29/2019

Author's Note

Reviews

[Eilis]

I really like the way you mix ideas here. The sensual alongside symbols of comfort. The emeralds and hot cocoa (albeit spicy :D). These juxtapositions speak to me of a greater depth than just a physical want. The soul wanting another soul intertwined with it perhaps.

Sometimes it’s not possible to get close enough. There are distances even in closeness that make it difficult to feel a complete sense of satisfaction.

But your poem reaches. That tenuto is inspired. What a lovely way of thinking about it. Musicality and stopping time to hold on. At least that’s how it shakes out in my head.

This is lovely work, E. Love and desire do create beautiful landscapes in the head-heart. When we step back and let them speak without fear.

[Einstein Noodle]

your review hits every note Ellis .. i am blessed this reached you in all the ways it should .. thank you for such a sensitive thorough read .. so happy it put you there .. i had not thought of those times that no amount of closeness will achieve a fulfillment looked for ... a whole other ballgame eh!? hmmmmmmmmmmm might just tuck that away and steal it from you! ;)
E.

[Eilis]

I look forward to reading your take on the idea, perhaps. You’re very welcome, E.

[R.E. Ray]

This poem speaks not only to want but the want of a mature man who has known true love and intimacy. I’ve seen how we evolve as we age. The want of physical love remains (ground red pepper) but sharing something deeper, the merger of two souls is the essence of love, and that’s what I read here. I enjoyed the image and music, too. I studied the image for several minutes, and I’m not sure if we see the same. I see an imaginative mind, one that not only imagines and creates poetry but love and magic from history and memories.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you sir...your comments are more than kind and generous .. makes me feel humble actually .. kind of embarrassed ..but i accept and thank you ... you hit the deep of this .. i see the whale as free yet constrained without knowing it ... and when i look at that pic i hear his cry ... feel his want ;) your sort of comments make it all worthwhile .. so glad you experienced this sir!
E.

[R.E. Ray]

You’re welcome. I always look forward to your new work. A true pleasure.

[Ken Simm.]

I love the combinations, the dichotomies in this love song. They go beyond mere passion and into something much deeper and dare I say it adult.
This feels, as I say, like a love song but one from afar. To another who is not there in the flesh as it were.
I could be way off beam however but I do like it. A lot.

[Einstein Noodle]

no...you are spot on my friend .. your read is sensitive and perceptive indeed ... feels pretty cool to be on the same wave length :) Happy New Year Ken!
E.

[DIVYA]

A passion-filled write, full of the vibrance of life and a longing for all its beautiful things. To live to the fullest, with all the senses alive and to feel a oneness with another soul, these are the things that make it all worth it. You touch all the vital aspects of life here.

[Einstein Noodle]

aww thanks Divya! you made me day that this spoke to you in such a way ... luv on ya! Best Happy New Year ever!! :)
E.

[DIVYA]

My pleasure dear E. Happy New Year to you & yours too. All great things are wished your way, my friend.

[andrew mitchell]

My Mother told me i want, can't have! Nice write Gene and merry xmas to you and yours.

[Einstein Noodle]

same to you sir!! and many many more to come .. thank you for the read and review always ... Mom's know best most of the time ;))))))))
E.

[emmajoy]

'.. i want .. breath to my life .. and drinking .. each from one dawn to another .. impaling our thoughts. '

There's magic and mystery here: a marriage of both the need for spirit - and body. You ask though perhaps would like to demand.. but, you don't and - that highlights such incredible desire. Your love.song (for surely that's what this is, coming from the depth of your Self) holds the most sensitive, adoring words meant to wrap the beloved in absolute truth.

[Einstein Noodle]

i just love you Em! i really do ... your words sent chills up and down me body ... thank you for your sensitive and immersive read of this ... absolutely blessed me day ma'am!

[emmajoy]

You, dear sir, are very welcome. This is a very special poem.

[emmajoy]

P.S. That accompanying picture is very.. powerful in a .. somewhat .. emotional way, There's an read moreP.S. That accompanying picture is very.. powerful in a .. somewhat .. emotional way, There's an
'another world' element to it.

[Einstein Noodle]

i love that picture ... i want to be the whale ;)

[emmajoy]

i play whale sounds sometimes... they take me away to somewhere truly beautiful... try Youtube,.

[Einstein Noodle]

yes!!! absolutely ethereal if humans can experience it at all ... the whales can do it ... we're in tune luv! ... star safe over the holidays!

[emmajoy]

YES, yes, and yes again!

Off and away to join the fun and games now.. Smile.. enjoy every moment!

[emmajoy]

Popped in to listen to the video again.. new one for me, but then, I'm a country girl and way behind the here and now.! Must admit that drinking coffee and chair dancing is NOT a good idea! Happy weekend, my friend. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

the video is new to me too ..but fits Ok i think .. and i meant "stay safe" not "star safe" .. but star safe sounds good to me ;) Happy New Year always! i am off to take Beau out to do his business ... so......you chair dance in your spare time :))))))))))))))))))))))))) yesterday i guess one could say i do too ... i have a bunch of "Classical Stretch" and Yoga exercises taped and do require a chair to keep me off the tipsy side :}

[emmajoy]

Know the feeling well! Am on dry days til new yea';s eve if you mean that kind of 'tipsy'! Niece, adult, arrived for soup and stuff, early snack lunch, then we go off and away to tilt at windmills as we call Saturday shopping in Dorset! (lie, but reads literary!) Tessa wants to re.read the collab and any naughty pieces peeps have posted. Must have a good talk with that girl.. :) She's looking over my shoulder, nudging me. Gone.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahahaha thanks for a fine chuckle for me dahlink! no.... i meant tipsy as in trying to balance doing stretch yoga exercises ;)

[emmajoy]

Laughing, means same when trying to keep upright!

One of my new year's resolutions: edit!

[An owl on the moon]

This is so tender, so beautifully voiced, creating a sacred space of love. There is a longing that awakens the heart and soul to all that is joy... all that fulfills a life. Wondrous.

[Einstein Noodle]

i feel pretty gratified this spoke to you the way i meant it to read ... thanks so much for visiting and sharing your thoughts ... love and joy sir!
E.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Your descriptives here are so beautiful where do you get your inspiration beautiful loved this one thanks 🙏

[Einstein Noodle]

i feel so gratified and happy you enjoyed reading and that it sparked your imagination ... inspiration comes from that muse icle place of course ;)) love on ya Julie ... Merry Christmas and may all your wishes come true :)
thank you for spending time my friend!
E.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Happy Xmas and safe healthy new year to you as well thanks 🙏

[Chris Shaw]

"I want you". Very powerful words. As powerful as "I love you". Intoxicating and sensual is this write Mr E. I feel the heat here. Hot chocolate and red hot pepper. Spicey comfort. "Your hair, alive with emeralds". You sparkle with this little write. 'impaling our thoughts', that is so good. Visual and steamy. Wonderful.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

Christine .... you have made my day ... thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts and feelings on this one ... your remarks kind of made me blush and gave me goose bumps ;) love on ya girl! peace and joy!
E.

[Neville]

Hey Gene.. where have I been sir....tis like I have been floundering in a thick fog... but having my eyes flung open as soon as I opened this page.... Dunno quite wot to say other than I am pretty certain these words must rank among my all time faves... well worth waiting for and so bloomin true... N :)))

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Neville .. i am happy this spoke to you ... top o' the marhnin' to ya! :)
E.

[Neville]

it bloomin did I tell ya... night night sir...

[Neville]

I had to come back .. I just had to sir .. I'm just a sucker for blue, the ocean, whales and words .. still one of me faves .......................... :)))

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha i couldn't feel more gratified and thankful sir! yes .. that pic is incredible isn't it!? peace and love my friend! peace and love!

[Neville]

there's not a thing about this page I done love n respect ................................................
:)

[Patricia Wedel]

Emeralds streaming seaside pearls to wear in my hair when Magnolias dance like Ballerinas in the seasons of time... simply Devine... Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

your reviews are always stunning and your voice runs true and wondrous ... not surprised the seaside in this called to you ;) so happy to have your review ... thanks Pat!