Forever Yours

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Forever Yours

thunder shakes loose the lightning 

rips apart roiling dark clouds and 

the rain pours down

the sagacity of her apophony astounds the most astute

her leisure hours spent to weary dowers 

they fall leaden at her feet

she skewers them on pikes

"Can't we get back the way it was? ... "  she said.

i couldn't speak

i was dumbed numb

it was the words

it was the presentation

it was all of that on steroid replay

hitting the mark ... constricting chest to throat

obstructing

                             words                                worlds

haven't the heart to toss it

perhaps just sell my lot and stock 

leave.

her breast wears  hard rocks

she filed away her pounding nails

while flailing at her skillet

drawing them out red hot and ready

her breath came rasped and rattled

and cursed her conscience battled

my defense badly mounted

cut short and pronounced

me

                                                                     helplessly guilty

helplessly guilty

You gave me everything then

You gave me no ...................thing

                                                                     the no thing was more

and you wanted me to follow you  .................. a real something 

some                            thing

tuning my ear with your bending strings and 

cry                                     cry                              cry

wanting money, your fame how you

try                                      try                              try

what about good bye?

04/06/2020

E.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

These lines speak to me of how people can find themselves on different pathways within a relationship. It sort of creeps up over you and then you realise that the person you thought you were perfectly in tune with has already left the building in spirit if not in body. It is a painful experience and I can feel the conflict here. You are worlds apart. Their values are not yours. When it gets to that stage, goodbye is the best solution. You can not live a lie. I felt the storm Mr E. It was raging, it was torture.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Chris :)

[Robert Trakofler]

I have a feeling it would take little work to make this a song:)
this reads like a subconscious string of thoughts in a brief photographic images as the lines melt into a feeling and then the lost possibility of what was or could of been leaves a lingering lament of longing and loss in a giant exclamation point at the end. I had to come back to this many times to fully absorb a very fine write good sir

[Einstein Noodle]

its the best of friends that keep coming back Bunny Boy ..thank you so very much for absorbing .. and your remarks are spot on .. i could not be more gratified having someone read and experience this one so completely .. love it .. thanks so much sir!
E.

[Ken Simm.]

It has become such a joy to watch you using your tools, your vocabulary and your mind to produce masterpieces such as this. I am in awe, quite simply. And that is before I get to the subject matter. I'll have to come back to this after I've finished painting.

[Einstein Noodle]

you can smudge my pages any time after you paint Sir Ken ... thank you always for taking time and for watching for any growth in my poems ... i confess they are getting closer to home and i think it makes a difference .... love and peace .. and please keep yourself safe!

[Ken Simm.]

I've come back as I said but only to find that I revel in your skill once more.
The main thrust of this is the line Can't we get it back to the way it was? That corners the whole masterpiece for me. Classic.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Ken ... much respect your way my friend ...i appreciate you taking time to return and read again ... i am humbled sir!
E.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very nice poem about a rocky relationship. I've had many of those relationships where I hurt everyone, sometimes it's best to let go.

[Einstein Noodle]

you got that right JungLee ... and so tragic when neither party can make that choice to say good bye ;) nice to have your visit ... see you around eh!?
E.

[NotUsinganymore]

See you around c:

[Sami Khalil]

A touching poem sir with wonderful wording and phraseology. Every line is an emotive treat down your memory lane of love forsaken. Usage of skillet denotes a lot. Her description at the first verses is out of this world. I see a story that needs to be written and sold...

[Einstein Noodle]

Sami! your comments have brought blood to my face .. no kidding .. i am so humbled and appreciative of your comments .. and yes .. the "skillet" is a lot in this Mr. Poet's Eye .. big love on ya sir .. thank you so much for taking time
E.

[Sami Khalil]

Big hugs and love. You are welcome and deserving .

[Sami Khalil]

"tuning my ear with your bending strings and
cry cry cry
wanting money, your fame"

[Sami Khalil]

"helplessly guilty

You gave me everything then
You gave me no ...................thing
the no thing was more"

[Sami Khalil]

"i couldn't speak

i was dumbed numb

it was the words"

[Einstein Noodle]

:)................. thanks Sami! your the best! :)you made me smile big this morning. peace brother
E.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe. You are welcome sir Eistein Noodle. Peace, love and harmony from the Cheahah to the Ozark...

[Einstein Noodle]

:))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Sami Khalil]

::::::))))))))))))))))

[Corset]

I love how you described her ice hot rage
"her breast wears hard rocks
she filed away her pounding nails
while flailing at her skillet
drawing them out red hot and ready

her breath came rasped and rattled
and cursed her conscience battled

this feels like the thick of an emotional battle, I've held and served out those rocks myself on occasion, right after I find myself too indignant to not throw them with care, they just go flying everywhere, tempers, hardest thing to do in this world sometimes is to do nothing when you feel you've been unjustly accused, but its sound more like in this instance a good defense is hell fire offense. very well written, we all have rocks my friend.

[Einstein Noodle]

how fine your honesty Corset ... makes me chuckle ... yes .. how difficult indeed when flailed and innocent ;} to hold the tongue and let the raging roll over like a river over pebbles ... we do all have rocks ...no doubt about it ... what a treat to have your review this morning .. i believe you have made me day!

[Corset]

as you have just made mine :D

[Einstein Noodle]

;) ......................

[gram linski]

another stunning poem, E, with the helplessly guilty line and destructivelove you gave me nothing, some powerfulwords conveying that disbelief from the man about who/what is the problem, good stuff, good stuff, E,

[Einstein Noodle]

we can get in a fix at times can't we gram?! :( either should say goodbye .. neither will ... thanks always for your reviewing me stuff sir ... i am deeply encouraged by you my friend ... thanks!
E.

[gram linski]

always good to see a new Noddle posting, E, hope you are well,

[Einstein Noodle]

we are gram ... wishing you the same of course :)