Swamp Lilly (also known as Turk Cap Lilly)

Swamp Lilly (also known as Turk Cap Lilly)

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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lilies many times represent purity, innocence and virtue and so is used here in contrast to the poem.

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                                       "Swamp Lilly"

Orange soot horizon waves a grey mirage

  A decoration of a morass midden rule
    Our reds whites and blues subdued
      middle ground's torn decoupage
         from left to right is skewed

            sustaining such distance
              harsh flesh is strewn
                 Rant rift railings
                   rising in tune

                    holding you
                      tightly in
                         lieu

7/20
E.
                                

© 2020 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
This form is one of Richards originals:
"NABLA DEL"
an original poetic form
created by Richard W. Jenkins
© 12 Dec 2001

In the shape of an upside down (inverted) triangle, this form must be centered for full effect, but may be aligned left or right when formatting will not permit center alignment.
There is no set syllable count per line, but each descending line must be reduced by (at least) two letters, until there is one word at the bottom, and a smooth sided inverted triangle has been produced.
12 Lines total are required in the following order:
1 … Opening/Introduction Line
2 … Quatrains (4-Line verses)
1 … 3-Line Closing Verse (triplet)
Rhyme scheme is: x, xbxb, xcxc, xxx (x = no rhyme). But, by author's choice, there can be more rhymes, as long as the required minimum rhyme scheme is met. A space between L1, each quatrain and the closing 3 lines is also required to meet Richard's form.


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So pleased I waited to view on my computer rather than phone. The splendid form was completely lost on a small screen. Now I can see it in all its inverted perfection and magnificent it looks too. I have never attempted a poem which has such a visual impact with its words. So clever. I love your lilies. We have some in our garden. I have always called them tiger lilies. They remind me of one of the characters in Rupert Bear stories I used to read a long, long time ago. Tiger Lily was a Chinese friend of Ruperts. As for the poem itself, I see this as being a statement of the political situation in your country. Extremes on both political sides, red and blue and the middle ground is left infertile. Not a healthy situation and quite a contrast in comparison to the purity of your lilies. Politics can stink at times. Happy Independence day Mr E. Hope you are having a very happy day, despite the politics and the covid. Sending my best to you. We have similar extremes over here.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

spot on Chris! that's exactly what I was trying to convey .. the middle ground use to be the place w.. read more
Christine Anne Shaw

4 Months Ago

Good for you :)



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It does seem as though we are held in limbo by both the left and the right these days. No middle ground is left anymore. Don't think I have ever seen turk cap lillies. They must be very pretty in person. The color draws me to the image. E, you really are wonderful with the form poetry. Kudos to you. Lydi**

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

thank you dear friend .. glad you enjoyed. One of my neighbors has them growing in his yard and told.. read more
Lydia Shutter

4 Months Ago

Ah, I see you did make a couple changes. How sweet that you planted the seeds near Bella's grave.
Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

:) ....................
E., I suppose I shouldn't have read this on July 4th. My mind went to politics, Trump (orange), political division (red Republicans, blue Democrats) and general discord. Sad, too, because it's a beautifully crafted poem and image. I should never insult a flower by saying it reminds of his big orange head. The artwork is lovely, the form and imagery impressive. Like many others, I've tried specific forms and generally failed. Kudos to you for this accomplishment. And, happy July 4th to you, sir.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

hi R.E.! well .. it is meant to be political but I did not have President Trump in mind, however the.. read more
R.E. Ray

4 Months Ago

You're welcome. And, I agree on the form challenge. I also listen to poets on YouTube. Lately, it'.. read more
The good part is that this form has no bearing on the reading of your words whatsoever . . . hate when poets get so "into" doing a form that the message itself feels like it got a little less attention. Here, your message is every bit the lively, imaginative & original flow of imagery that we know & love from you, Gene (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

always a joy to see you have spent time on me pages girl! thank you! and thank you for your comments.. read more
Always learning E. New flower and form to me, although I had to change from app to desktop site to see the full effect.
Mightily impressed.
I seem to recall when I first read one of your cinquain that I got a bit obsessed by them, so will learn this form and most likely annoy everyone by posting loads of them.
I see a burning sky and disaffection spreading throughout. And knowing what the red, white and blue means to you guys, I can't but help see lots of angry faces with MAGA caps on... (pic isn't too clear, but are they all wearing trump masks, or are they like gremlins fed after midnight, exploding into a trumpet of trumps??? &? 😀
Sustaining such distance speaks for itself in these infected days and leaves me wondering if when lockdown eases, we will have a new syndrome of people fearing touch or contact of any kind.
Bubble syndrome perhaps 😀
The you at the end really focuses this piece with a sudden stop, like tyres screeching, seeing the you directly in your path.
But then, aren't the you's always in our thoughts?
Nice one Sir. Still resonating after reading. A second viewing is a must.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

well ... i have actually messed up the easiest part of this one .. 12 lines .. when i transferred it.. read more
Lorry

4 Months Ago

No worries E, will keep an eye out for it.
Lorry

4 Months Ago

Yep, I'll be keeping a copy of this as a template to.my feeble attempts 😀
this looks like a flower whose insides is filled with perfect description.
I am not good with different kinds of form, but admire those who can pull it off.
and you do here, sir.
and she is your flower...love how this ends with that one most important word..."YOU"-
clever, E.
j.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

thanks jacob ... i know you have to "suffer" forms ;) and so i especially appreciate your feedback o.. read more
I am going to come back to this one later dear Mr E, because the inverted triangle does not show up on my phone so I will have to wait until I am sitting at my desk before I give you the response you so deserve.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

thanks Chris! i appreciate that for sure .. the form is important ;)
E.
A wonderful shape/form and brilliant imagery sown here E. I relished this piece...actually, for some reason, I am seeing upside down triangles a lot today, has to mean something I think :) As for the poem, you balance such beauty with tension then edge the tension with a delicate light and mingle harder tones with the fragile beauty. Quite astounding, I always find your poetry so, amazing :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

wow .. you bless me with this generous and very sensitive read ... so happy this affected you in jus.. read more
Sort of seeing Lillie's in a different context now.
Got this idea of someone coming towards me looking all pure and innocent with deep undertones lurking in the shadows. Quite like the idea of poetry in shapes, just need to get my head around what shape and what subject now and how it can kill you. Seeing me and Norma in the woods now looking all innocent with our 45s ready to shoot people who are not social distancing. In fact, they don't even need to be social distancing, just need to be in the woods.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

ahahahaha ... with Norma at one's side .. no need to worry about a thing .. she sees in all directio.. read more
Paul Bell

4 Months Ago

I can only try this.

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