Nightwing

Inspired partly by the DC comics character of the same name.

black basalt
and scattered dots of white -
seagulls dodging the waves
under a pale moon.

darker wings rise;
a bird of night
among the scattered reflections
of stars.

nightwing, they call him.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

creates a mood...starts out in a nature kind of way...but toward the end we do get that edge of darkness to it...and it gets darker---reminds me of Batman and how Gotham was unsure at first if he was good or evil...there is a fine line...and the night can cover both.

[Sylver]

Thanks for the review. Out of curiosity, do you think that there's anything I could have done better? And what was your favorite part?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i had positive thoughts, really...as to the brevity of lines and the stark imagery...liked both---unless i see something that really negatively jumps out at me...i usually just try to identify with works in my own way---i feel that is what poetry is for the reader...but no...you have said it quite well, as i see it.

[Sylver]

Thanks for the input.

[emmajoy]

You've really captured both a mood and style; plus, delicately painted a glimpse of a moment or few.

[V]

I like your use of words, they create nice pictures of the night. If I hadn't read your description, I wouldn't have guessed it's about a comic character, but maybe about something more natural and simple to think of like a bird, for example. Nonetheless, it's a splendid piece of darkness.

[Sylver]

A splendid piece of darkness? Wow. That's actually the most flattering review any of my works has ever gotten. (Does that say something about me? Probably. Do I mind? Not in the slightest.)

Thanks a bunch.

[V]

You're welcome. It is deserved.