oasis:utopia

I don't regret this regret.

It is a vast stretch of sand, my heart.

Miles to explore in the dark.

Once it dared to blossom,

They say it's utopia.

Ask me how.

Your love came by. 

That is how.

A single drop it was.

So powerful, it didn't evaporate.

The heat of my wrath failed.

And although I never saw you again

You carved in my heart an oasis.

My heart now can live and blossom.

Reviews

[Effector Prime]

Brilliant! Explores the precincts of infatuation and carves upon the frontiers of romance and passion. So fundamental, not unlike the sunrise and sunset with no words wasted on sunshine.. You have executed your thoughts with such ease.. Admirable :) Thanks for sharing

[Namrata]

I am happy you liked this. Going through this was not easy , anyways.

[Effector Prime]

yeah lol bottom line: I liked it :D

[Effector Prime]

It couldn't have been (easy).. The poem fairly elucidated your intent to highlight only what was rationally livening.. an escape from reality? Human intelligence is such a relief ey :)
Love is never easy for those who live by it.. that's because love is a myth, a fairy tale.. it does not exist.. it is the superficial bond that houses and nurtures procreation that's all.. a devious measure by the designers

[Namrata]

love can't be superficial, it must be real, I have felt the real pain and where pain was, in guise of pleasure or naked, but it was there.

[Effector Prime]

that's the ugly-beauty of love. It shines light on the positives and hides all the negatives.. I don't deny that love can lead to happiness but such an ending (or new beginning?) could only be possible after you have experienced "the lost 'oasis'(-in your words)". To gain, you have to lose. However, if you effect loss and then/consequently gain, the pain will be greatest. So much that you will wish you were never alive to experience such disdain. Your poem has more meaning than you believe. It opens me a new book every time I read it (well, at least in 24 hour gaps) :D cheers!

[Namrata]

so do you say my writing has "not hypothetical" effect on you ? And as for love, complicated mystery, its good to be tangled in it. Not a necessary fundamental to exist in universe,though. Evolution came about through competition,not love.

[Effector Prime]

hypothetical? your poem is perfect N. It explains your feelings in a very effectively executed intent. I'm only propounding my personal cynicism(s) of this mysterious virtue, love. And love was never tied with "progress" as per se. Love is something everyone finds something common. But everyone don't share it. Only a comparatively negligible cluster (or the stereotypical "pair") share it. Your poem had an instant, memorable effect on me; it lingers moreso. That's the beauty of poetry. There are no norms

[Namrata]

stereotypical pair, I like your take on it and ya, everyone is entitled to their opinions, so...

[Effector Prime]

lol cheers!

[Effector Prime]

I'd say I was wrong wrong all along. Love does exist. It proves to be the only most elusive find.

[Namrata]

Eye opener, huh ? This one ?

[Effector Prime]

Yes indeed, even this..

[An owl on the moon]

What a beautiful vision... the touch of love on the heart that sets it in bloom... transforms it into an oasis even when love is in the distance... a faint light remaining... This utopia... this is the desire so many have and so few ever find.

[Namrata]

Thank you for the review.

[Wordpress]

You could totally expand on this poem, it's a marvel yet feels unfinished. Even with stanzas of four lines each, this would read so much more powerfully...

[Namrata]

Thank you for reviewing. I would love to expand this poem but it's a very personal poem and I refuse to go ahead without experiencing a few more changes in my life and the heart's blossom.I am glad you would want more.

[Matching Socks]

Sometimes all it takes is that single drop.
Nicely done namrata.

[Confuser]

I hope you don't mind me reading your poem. I saw an intriguing review from you - seemed to be a quite spirited young lady, that is not fearful and quite confident. From the first line, It is a vast stretch of sand, my heart. Wow, almost somber, sad but leading me onward, hitting me with many images, of experience or maybe it will go on and on. And then the journey conjuring up the image of an oasis, finding love. Then the explanation of the why is quite beautiful: A single drop, evoking the power that single drop had: it didn't evaporate: how lovely said. You wrote the word "carved" in my heart and I could invision those words there, we cannot see, like the Chinese use to write on the bones, they burned of their ancestors. Oasis, the ending is wonderful and oh, the heat of my wrath failed. The hurt dissapainted; how great this poem is. I like your style of writing. Thank you very much. From an inexperienced poet, learning from great writers such as yourself.

[Namrata]

Why, thank you so much for the sincere review. I feel ecstatic. I would love it if I am of any help or inspiration to you... Your name , again ?
This poem is very dear to me and written with care.
Peace.

[Surya pradha]

beautiful lines, nice flow. enjoyed it!

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Splendid!!!

A fine work of art with words, an inspiring end and a pleasurable read

Namrata, thanks for sharing

[MoriartyMesa]

As a chef there is a little known saying, "Nothing makes you kiss the sky than a nice meal", another means happiness is in the little beautiful things of life.

[Namrata]

Why, thank you for stopping by.

[DIVYA]

You are a very powerful writer. Every line creates magic in the reader. Solid wording and impressive imagery. Please keep writing and sharing Namrata.

[Namrata]

Thank you for the kind review. :D

[kollaboratyve]

Nice a very romantic piece.never stop writing!

[Namrata]

Thank you. I never will. :D

[Stonz P.]

Well, you made me write such a long explanation... grrrr...

hehehe... the flow is good and the message of hope is what I admire, that is put forward in such a short piece. Just because someone breaks the connection of two loving souls, does not mean there can be no one else... it should pave the way to a better experience with the next person we connect with.. And you are young, you write pieces that have layered meanings.. I wish that you only improve..
Good luck.

[Namrata]

Yeeaah ! Glad to have you review my work again. You get my message, that is pleasing. And thank you for your wishes. Pleease don't judge me by my age, it is a two digit number . It will never get promoted to a 3 digit number. Judge me by my words, if you will. They get wiser everyday ( leaving back silly ideas and reminding me how stupid I was ).

[Stonz P.]

I try not to judge anyone in any respect :) Keeps me grounded.

[Namrata]

Now, that is such a relief !