Variables and Invasive thoughts.

today i feel like being honest

not to curl underneath the covers

feel the wrinkles on my mama hands

reminded by the force of causes

hope for time to be a little more

careful about the weakest among us

I like to hide in the sickness around me

so that I could look around and feel normal

But what really got me thinking,

woken up from slumber by a speaking

emotionless and aroused, on all fours 

crawling all the floor of my maison up above

looking for a secret, that would keep me on my toes

keep me from the hungry love, 

be a keeper of the club

from ancient swords to digital ipods 

the world is rolling down the hill

and a*s a sphere of the clan

all the women round they ran

celebrate the end of days

and ignore the cows

everybody wants to love, 

as the chemicals turn to reason

and the reason burns of trees

smoke my brain, snort the cheese

all the gods that we done pleased

are the gods we came to be

so crystals take to air 

as the carbon is released 

all the value of a bond 

melted into degrees

now my conscious calls to me

wants to keep me sacred 

and protect all interests

for about 70 years

a slave sat about

as the rains deliver drought

all the festival quests fall short

for that one man they couldnt ever 

cover up that doubt

so he is glistening now

and soaking in the strange

whiskey drops from his brain

and he is as clear as a cloud

and he promises to himself 

that he will not lose himself

then he stands in the glory

of a promised change

and bends to the table

and snorts all the blow

shakes his wings till they fall off

and flies to the skies 

to join in the club.

Reviews

[Shane Mohamed]

This is abstract poetry. It is a fair try but you still need some work. I can't give any advice because I don't write abstract poetry much but like I said it was good. To be honest I didn't really get the message out of it. Keep writing. Thanks for sharing.

[slayerjay]

Thank you for the advice. This is also new for me, but I really enjoyed writing this somehow. I did lose focus but that was what I was trying to achieve, to just write what came to my mind about chaos in life in general.