Lost and Found

Lost and Found

A Poem by sleepingsun1

Who are you I meet at in the eve

Who with one glance makes me hope and believe

That I have found in your heart Eden’s paradise

And helps me to love, but forsake passion as the price.

       

For thou art no Gabriel or light bringer

No Seraphim or Cherubim, their radiance doth not linger

On thine face, and yet you and I may call

Our union the celestial benevolence before the Fall.

                          

For it is the trust that is so dear

That I had lost in that God I so fear

Now found in this unlikely source

Who’s eyes are soft, but who’s voice is coarse.

 

And in coarse beauty, contradictory sound

I have found a paradoxical glory, all past bound

And delivered as a gift to thee, as that faithful hound

Has fled from the wilderness into shelter; lost, now found.  

© 2012 sleepingsun1


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Line 1 - 'at' is not required
Line 3 - comma
Line 4 - change and to it? or helps to help...something just seems off.
Line 10 - change had to have - the tense has changed

Other than the suggestions above which are minor and grammatical; this is a really good piece with a lot of promise. I look forward to more.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Tags: Lover, New, View, God, Religion, Emotion, Depth, Debate, Heart, Angel, Humanity, Perfection, Imperfection, Fall, Adam, Eve, Eden, Trust, Agnosticism, Theism, Hope, Paradox, Confusion, Depravity, Beaut

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sleepingsun1

Richmond, Yorkshire , United Kingdom



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